Science Fiction Fantasy Chronicles: forums - View Single Post - Chapter 2 2nd book, Looking for mistakes, or weak parts

nj1 · 10th December 2007, 10:02 PM

Is this just an outline of the chapter or the complete version. The reason I ask is there is little conversation in this piece and found it a bit hard to read as there is no conversation to show how they have decided about the course of action they are taking or how they all feel about the events you have wriiten about.

P.s. I'm no expert at this so don't take me the wrong way.

10th December 2007, 10:02 PM	#2 (permalink)
nj1 monkey is magic Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Rhondda Cynon Taff Posts: 302	Re: Chapter 2 2nd book, Looking for mistakes, or weak parts Is this just an outline of the chapter or the complete version. The reason I ask is there is little conversation in this piece and found it a bit hard to read as there is no conversation to show how they have decided about the course of action they are taking or how they all feel about the events you have wriiten about. P.s. I'm no expert at this so don't take me the wrong way.