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10th March 2006, 03:03 PM
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| He hath an axe to grynde  Join Date: Feb 2006
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| If - a cat poem Not strictly a fantasy/SF theme, admittedly... but closely tied to my recently published novel, which is... Anyway - here's a new take on an old favourite: IF If you can keep your head when all around you Are losing theirs and tripping over you If you can find a home when none has found you And claim their garden, house and bedroom too If you can wash a mile from any water And roam without recourse to any map Unwind from cold and calculating slaughter By curling on a warm and cosy lap: If you can fall, and find your feet by falling If you can sleep, yet keep a watchful brain If you can wake the dead with caterwauling Or die yourself, and live to die again If you can stare for minutes without blinking And wear for hours on end a dreamy smile And seem to think – quite undisturbed by thinking – Through narrowed eyes aglow with secret guile: If you can make one heap of shredded paper From books they thought were safely out of reach And sigh, and sulk, and claw and madly caper At all attempts to reprimand or teach If you can force your bleary-headed owner To let you in and out the door at dawn And oscillate from socialite to loner And stare back in again with face forlorn: If you can walk on shelves and spare the china Ignore commands but answer to your name If you can hog the whole of a recliner Designed to hold the largest human frame If you can turn to stone for half a minute And climb a tree in fifteen seconds flat Yours is the blackbird, nightingale and linnet, For – after all – you are a cat. My cat. |
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10th March 2006, 04:34 PM
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| Fierce Vowelless One  Join Date: Apr 2003
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| Re: If - a cat poem Smashing. Truly. I really like this. Now you just need a very nice black and white minimalist drawing of a cat, in several silhouettes (jumping, sleeping, stretching and whatnot) for illustration. |
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10th March 2006, 09:11 PM
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| former axe demon  Join Date: Oct 2005
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| Re: If - a cat poem sounds like one of our cats -the white one- she's very smart, she looks left and right before crossing roads and all, she knows hw to open the door, she knows exactly where and when to be for food- and she does such things too, my book on " 70 wonders throughtout the world" still bares the marks... great poem! great image  |
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24th October 2006, 07:22 AM
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| Moderator  Join Date: May 2006
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| Re: If - a cat poem "and oscillate from socialite to loner".... Yep. That's a cat. "LOVE ME!" to "WHO THE DEVIL DO YOU THINK YOU ARE? I DON'T REMEMBER GIVING YOU PERMISSION TO ENTER THE PRESENCE!" in the blink of an eye.... and back again. Little furry pain-in-the-butt....  Very good indeed. |
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29th December 2006, 08:46 PM
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| Shadow Writer  Join Date: Nov 2006
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| Re: If - a cat poem I am not a cat lover but could easily see the feline as you so skillfully protrayed yours in this poem. You pulled out images that define most cats and are easy to connect to for the readers with cats. Wonderful flow and a nice read. |
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