Moved to critiques.
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Originally Posted by anthorn I'm not sure what to go with. |
I'm in agreement with Birol on this one. From what I can see they're both telling the same story, so what does it matter at this point? I can appreciate the goal of the blurb - probably better called a synopsis at this point - but so long as it outlines the story, it probably doesn't matter which you go with. Don't get carried away with honing the thing before you even start the novel. The finished product may little resemble what you've laid down here.
Beyond that, all three pieces are riddled with basic spelling and grammar errors that you'll probably want to fix up. The first one that hit me was 'Destinies' in the title, which I'm thinking should be 'Destiny's', no? There is a lot of random capitalisation, as well as frequent sentence fragments.