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Originally Posted by Spectrum  Personally I am proud of my names
Does it? Hm... I haven't read them. I don't recall reading any books with an "underground" war quite like the one I have. (The closest thing is the Kult RPG, if anyone knows that.) But of course, that's not obvious from these three-four lines.  |
Good for you, I just felt the names seemed a touch overthought. I hate every time I read a name in a book, thinking how should this be pronounced.
I understood underground meant a covert struggle and your elaboration in subsequent posts confirmed my first thoughts of two lots of erm . . bad guys vying for supremecy in relativley unknown struggles to the rest of the worlds populace, yadda yadda yadda . . . if you haven't read this you haven't read much of
Feist, Martin, Erikson and Tolkien(to a degree) and of course evedident in the bore series, Wheel of Time, I mention Baldurs Gate the RPG PC game because it's a big part of the sequel the Theives guild having an "underground" or perhaps "underworld" is a better term, war with the Assasins guild.
When I say paint by numbers the whole blurb reeks of similar fantasy material, don't get me wrong "if it ain't broke don't fix it." I loved Gemmel and still re-read his work RIP. If you want an example of formulaic, he's it, but he's set apart in the sense his writing was fast expolsive and enjoyable, it made you give a . . . . Yet alot of his books felt like his older work re-hashed. I couldn't get enough though!!You need to want us (the consumer) to really want to know what happens in your tale. Add a bit of mystery don't lay it all out for us to
assume that it is like evey other similar book.
You asked for critique, you don't need to be so defensive, I'm a consumer and obviously my opinions are purely that, opinions.
