Spectrum,
Not a bad idea to come out with this. Reducing your novel down to the exciting bare bones, but I reckon it is a very specialised skill so good on you.
For my part A world is not cruel So
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Mith is a world of cruelty, punctured by war and betrayal.
Bent on conquest, the theocratic empire of Durcac send their armies north against their rival nation,the Imetrium and General Nārkizā, faithful but sceptical leader of their forces will find his conscience and loyalty stretched between his god and his homeland.
Elsewhere a young mage Carzain will find his true calling when his peaceful country is invaded and he enlists in its defence. But in the chaos of war he also discovers dark secrets buried in his past.
And in the gloom, a sinister force, long thought to be extinct, awakens, and an ancient underground war between two shadowy brotherhoods erupts in full flame.
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Just wanted to change some things, but my main thing as Memnoch says who is the general and why are his loyalties etc to be tested. It comes across that you have not written his story arc because the blurb is vague. Same problem with me with underground, do you mean hidden or subterranean.
The story sounds fine to me, don't worry about cliche, if the story is good and well written the characters will take us on a journey. Some people beleive there are no new ideas, just old one rewritten (better Ha.)