Wow! That was one of the most interesting things I’ve read all week! And that’s saying something, considering I’ve conquered three new novels and a handful of short stories.
Despite the technical jargon, which fits the genre well but is not to my personal taste, I’d have to say your writing is almost poetic. It let me flow from one line to the next.
I did have a question though, due to my ignorance of Sci-fi writing. You seem to label scenes, perhaps?
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It reminds me very much of a screen play! At least, that part does 
I hope you write more for us to see, I’d love to continue reading.