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Dexter · 6th August 2007, 10:10 AM

I Will Not Last

I gazed upon the stars last night
Transfixed beneath their mortal light
And trembled at their ashen fate
For I could see our common plight

Entropy is our last estate
But I’ll be gone before that date
What of me will survive my end
That will not rot or fade away

How long will tales be told by friends
Of my many shenanigans
Beyond those first horrendous tears
When they’re finally on the mend

I grew calm as my mind ran clear
I shouldn’t hold those thoughts so dear
Those foolish polyps of my fear
Are nothing more and I am here

Whew. My first poem was very easy compared to this. I don't know how you poets do it. I have hammered away at this thing for better than 14 hours over three days. Does that sound normal to you all? Or am I just slow? Anyway, it is a cheerier poem than my first one. The question is: is it a good poem?

6th August 2007, 10:10 AM	#287 (permalink)
Dexter Registered User Join Date: Jul 2007 Posts: 131	Re: Do You Write Poetry? I Will Not Last I gazed upon the stars last night Transfixed beneath their mortal light And trembled at their ashen fate For I could see our common plight Entropy is our last estate But I’ll be gone before that date What of me will survive my end That will not rot or fade away How long will tales be told by friends Of my many shenanigans Beyond those first horrendous tears When they’re finally on the mend I grew calm as my mind ran clear I shouldn’t hold those thoughts so dear Those foolish polyps of my fear Are nothing more and I am here Whew. My first poem was very easy compared to this. I don't know how you poets do it. I have hammered away at this thing for better than 14 hours over three days. Does that sound normal to you all? Or am I just slow? Anyway, it is a cheerier poem than my first one. The question is: is it a good poem?