Woot! that is
hard SF!
I liked it very much, but it may be over technified for a lot of people. Reminds me a bit of Cherryh.
Personally I would lose the last two sentences of post 1:
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These People could not know their bane was the least particle in the cosmos. They would never believe three such splendid warships were doomed by the fleeting, yet so numerous 0.3 eV Neutrino...
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Firstly, it kind of gives away the final result, and secondly,
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It was a nice plan-- while it lasted.
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is a great line to end an introduction or preface.