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Would I ever contradict you? even if you need to look up the difference between "hyphen" and "dash" (not this thread, no)
Right then, I will
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It was as if I were [was] looking into a rising sun.
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The "if I were" here is subjunctive mood, and even if few still use it (and I wouldn't correct someone who used "was") it is grammatically correct (and I am one of the few who would)
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as I looked upon the stones they came alive. It was amazing and at the same time frightening. The stones seemed to be covered in writhing colors and rippling like the surface of a lake. The stones appeared to almost quiver while bright colors danced over their surface. I was drawn into them.
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This probably falls in the general "repetition" bag but I'd point out that the English language is the richest in the world in synonyms; it is nearly always possible to find an alternative word for any given object and frequently, in doing so, you give more information about the object than by repeating the same word.