[Phil Brown]

Originally Posted by VelvetGirl

“Hunter, state your report” Molten's voice demanded, ringing through the stillness in the air. Hunter sank in to a bow, his rough front talons tucked under his body in submission. All these formalities weren’t necessary he thought, a twitch of annoyance spread across his wolf like face. He, the lowest ranking of the 7 rulers would prove himself. And they would be sorry they doubted him. It was he, Hunter who would bring the birth of the more powerful Tempest Dragon empire. Then, they would understand what he had seen all along. With this in mind he raised his head from his bow and stood facing the 6 other rulers. They sat in a triangle around him, each one focusing their full attention on Hunter, as if daring him to turn and claim his discovery for himself.

I think numbers up to ten should be spelt out in words.

Originally Posted by VelvetGirl

Originally Posted by VelvetGirl

He surveyed the rulers, no longer intimidated by them. Not even by Molten-Claw, a high-ranking ruler with a deep scar running from between his ears down his muzzle. His tail was curled around his body, lying besides him. His long tail spikes facing upward. Hunter wondered if it was by accident that his tail lay in the threatening position. Perhaps not such an accident, he decided, as Molten-Claw’s yellow eyes bore in to his, showing his cruelty and hunger for power. Hunter cleared his throat, stared straight back in to Molten-Claw’s eyes and replied, “I have found the perfect species my fellow rulers. They live in ignorance to the parallel Earths around them. But they are so very rich in technology.”

I think besides should be beside.

Originally Posted by VelvetGirl

“Un heard of, this will make it too easy. We will be unstoppable, we will be able to capt-“

I think - should be --