| Re: A Short Scene
Hello,
You have painted a good scene here and its more show than tell, which is good. The pace was fine and it flowed well for me. I've nothing else to add that hadn't already been mentioned by Flynx(excellent crit!).
And although I would want to know more about Alexya, it is as you had said, its just a scene and this particular scene worked well more me.
Keep writing!
Kitera |