| Re: A Short Scene
Cheers, flynx. Good advice throughout. I'm a slave to the passive voice. I just can't seem to shake it, no matter how I try. Sigh. More practice needed...
Good point about her description, it never crossed my mind. I hate stopping the narrative for a drawn-out description, as that usually kills the pace quick sticks, so I'm fond of dropping snippets in here and there. I'd say the fact that it is so short contributed - I just never got 'round to it.... |