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socrates2479 · 28th September 2006, 08:55 AM

Ah, you have added an extra line at the end. I think this removes the emotional impact you generated with : Asmodeus had to orchestrate the death of a Watcher.

We already know that Gregory is the Watcher. I n my opinion it works better without : Gregory had to die.

28th September 2006, 08:55 AM	#13 (permalink)
socrates2479 Registered User Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 19	Re: Noble Masque..Chapter 1. Ah, you have added an extra line at the end. I think this removes the emotional impact you generated with : Asmodeus had to orchestrate the death of a Watcher. We already know that Gregory is the Watcher. I n my opinion it works better without : Gregory had to die.