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Old 10th August 2005, 09:44 PM   #1 (permalink)
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The Quick Brown Fox: poem

Just posting a poem for the heck of it....



THE QUICK BROWN FOX
by Terry Weide

The quick brown fox,
Jumps over the lazy dogs.
He leads them through a
Valley of silver pines
That shiver in the wind.
He skips across fields of
Green wheat and creeks of ice.
The barks from the pack fade.
Slowing, he lets the dogs
Close,
Then grins back--
Sticking his tongue out.
Circling them through
Brown grass and stick tights,
He comes from behind and
Does it again.
The quick brown fox
Jumps over the lazy dogs.


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Old 10th August 2005, 11:41 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Re: The Quick Brown Fox: poem

Strange subject - awesome poem!
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Old 10th August 2005, 11:53 PM   #3 (permalink)
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its even more interesting when you know that the first and last two lines have all the characters of te alphabet
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Old 11th August 2005, 12:07 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Thanks, Lacedaemonian! Much appreciated. Read my reply to dreamwalker, and perhaps the strangeness of the subject will disappear.

Best wishes, Terry
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Old 11th August 2005, 12:10 AM   #5 (permalink)
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Hi, Dreamwalker,

I imagine it does have all the letters of the alphabet in it. The quick brown fox is an old typing exercise that used to be taught in American junior high and high school office classes. I simply used that keyboarding exercise and turned into a free verse poem.

Thanks again for the feedback, best wishes, Terry
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Old 13th August 2005, 09:30 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Pretty interesting and original idea you've got there. I think the first half of the poem is a bit better than the second, though it's hard to say why.

This doesn't work that well IMO:

"He comes from behind and
Does it again. "

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Old 13th August 2005, 09:42 PM   #7 (permalink)
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Hey, Brys,

I appreciate the feedback. If I ever rewrite this piece, I will keep your comments in mind.

Best wishes and good luck with your own writing, Terry Weide
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Old 18th August 2005, 02:00 PM   #8 (permalink)
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What a fun poem! I like the fact that this silly phrase we used to have to type over and over was used as a starting point. I also like the image of the snobby hunters being laughed at and run circles around by the fox! Good stuff.
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Old 19th August 2005, 08:02 AM   #9 (permalink)
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Re: The Quick Brown Fox: poem

Perhaps losing the caps at the beginning of each line for easier reading?

The quick brown fox,
jumps over the lazy dogs.
He leads them through a
valley of silver pines
that shiver in the wind.
He skips across fields of
green wheat and creeks of ice.
The barks from the pack fade.
Slowing, he lets the dogs
close,
then grins back--
sticking his tongue out.
circling them through
brown grass and stick tights,
he comes from behind and
does it again.
The quick brown fox
jumps over the lazy dogs.
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Old 26th August 2005, 04:34 AM   #10 (permalink)
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Re: The Quick Brown Fox: poem

Dwndrgn, thanks for the kind words concerning my humble poetry. Much appreciated.

SDNess, I appreciate the feedback. When I was writing this one, I did play with the capitalization. To me, it looks better stylistically to begin each line with caps, which why I went with them. I may, however, take your advice at some point and go for grammatical correctness instead of style on a rewrite.

Thanks again to both of you for the responses. Sorry it took me a few days to reply, but I was reading other threads. Best wishes, Terry
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Old 27th August 2005, 05:44 AM   #11 (permalink)
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Interesting. I've always felt it looks nicer with the "correct punctuation," but to each his own.
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