Imperial Spy

[Balinor]

how about in stead of :
"The task appears straightforward, but the young spy quickly finds herself ensnared in an elaborate trap. Isolated in a hostile country, hunted by the authorities and with her arch-enemy closing in for his revenge, Femke needs all her wit and skills to survive"

try putting:
"a straight forward task turns into to an elaborate trap as femke finds herself iolated in a hostile country, hunted by the authorities and with a ruthless assassin closing in for his revenge, Femke needs all her wit and skills to survive"

it makes the blurb read more easily whilst keeping the sense of why she is being hunted.

also, could u put a griffon into one of your future books as they are the coolest magical creatures

[Mark Robson]

Originally Posted by Balinor

how about in stead of :
"The task appears straightforward, but the young spy quickly finds herself ensnared in an elaborate trap. Isolated in a hostile country, hunted by the authorities and with her arch-enemy closing in for his revenge, Femke needs all her wit and skills to survive"

try putting:
"a straight forward task turns into to an elaborate trap as femke finds herself iolated in a hostile country, hunted by the authorities and with a ruthless assassin closing in for his revenge, Femke needs all her wit and skills to survive"

it makes the blurb read more easily whilst keeping the sense of why she is being hunted.

also, could u put a griffon into one of your future books as they are the coolest magical creatures

Good suggestion, Balinor, but it might be a little late to change now. Also, the sentence is very long. Generally, blurbs tend to have short, sharp points to grab the attention, but I can see the attraction of the way you have phrased it.

I've never considered using a griffon. What sort of character do you think it would have? Would the griffon be able to speak? Do you think it would be a creature for good, evil, or a neutral power? I have a story that a griffon could be brought into, so I'd be interested in how you would visualise it.

[dwndrgn]

Mark: Do you want my opinion? Well, I'll give it even if you don't, 'cause that's the kind of troublemaker I am

A gryphon/griffon, if it were a magical creature, should be able to communicate mind to mind, in a similar manner as dragons in many stories do.

If it is just a beast, then its brain and beak would not allow it the power of speech as we know it.

Balinor - did you read Mercedes Lackey's White Gryphon and the rest? They are good stories. In fact, my first online user name came from one of her characters in Black Gryphon.

[Mark Robson]

Originally Posted by dwndrgn

Mark: Do you want my opinion? Well, I'll give it even if you don't, 'cause that's the kind of troublemaker I am

A gryphon/griffon, if it were a magical creature, should be able to communicate mind to mind, in a similar manner as dragons in many stories do.

If it is just a beast, then its brain and beak would not allow it the power of speech as we know it.

Balinor - did you read Mercedes Lackey's White Gryphon and the rest? They are good stories. In fact, my first online user name came from one of her characters in Black Gryphon.

Remind me - Griffon/Gryphon - half lion, half eagle? I seem to remember them being very proud and generally a force for good/neutral. Would this make sense? The telepathy is accepted, Dwndrgn, and I guess you know which story this will appear in!

[rune]

Sounds very interesting, despite the fact there isnt any magic included in the plot. Sounds like there may be other things that may interest me

I'll have to watch out for it next year.

[Balinor]

The griffon would be a force for good. i think that telepathy would be the only way that the griffon would communicate.

btw, my avatar is a griffon

and no i havent heard of the books you mentioned dwndrgn but ill look out for them.

[Balinor]

Originally Posted by Mark Robson

Remind me - Griffon/Gryphon - half lion, half eagle? I seem to remember them being very proud and generally a force for good/neutral. Would this make sense? The telepathy is accepted, Dwndrgn, and I guess you know which story this will appear in!

which story would this be?

[dwndrgn]

Originally Posted by Balinor

which story would this be?

Take a cruise through the Aspiring Writers sub-forum and you'll figure it out.

[Balinor]

Originally Posted by dwndrgn

Take a cruise through the Aspiring Writers sub-forum and you'll figure it out.

Could you be a little more specific? theres a lot of stuff there

[Mark Robson]

Originally Posted by Balinor

Could you be a little more specific? theres a lot of stuff there

The story Dwndrgn refers to (she's being coy) is the one I wrote for her - it's called Dawn Dragon and you'll find it here: http://www.chronicles-network.net/fo...ead.php?t=3621

I've decided to turn this into a book, which I hope to start working on seriously in about November this year. I'm intending to call the book Dragon Pact. Any other thoughts for potential characters will be welcome.

[Balinor]

Oh, i've read the prologue to that. it sounds good but is it gonna have lots of magic and magical creatures in it or just dragons (and a griffon )
one of the characters could be called Matt
what races will there be, just humans or elves, dwarves etc?

[Mark Robson]

Originally Posted by Balinor

Oh, i've read the prologue to that. it sounds good but is it gonna have lots of magic and magical creatures in it or just dragons (and a griffon )
one of the characters could be called Matt
what races will there be, just humans or elves, dwarves etc?

Balinor, with the plot line I've worked out I don't intend there to be magicians in this story, but I've not ruled out the possibility. There will be some 'magic' involved, but I don't want to give too much away. There will, however, be plenty of space for mythical and magical creatures, so any suggestions along those lines will be good. I'm not big on elves and dwarves as I always feel that using these makes everyone instantly compare them to the races in Lord of the Rings, so the majority of the characters will be human.

I'm sure that one of the characters could be Matt. His full name might be Mattias, or Mathias. Matt is a nice, simple name, and I always like to keep the names simple in my stories.

[Balinor]

cool, i'll be famous

[dwndrgn]

Originally Posted by Mark Robson

The story Dwndrgn refers to (she's being coy) is the one I wrote for her - it's called Dawn Dragon and you'll find it here: http://www.chronicles-network.net/fo...ead.php?t=3621

I've decided to turn this into a book, which I hope to start working on seriously in about November this year. I'm intending to call the book Dragon Pact. Any other thoughts for potential characters will be welcome.

I think that is the first time in my life I've ever been described as 'coy'. Thanks for the chuckle!!

[Mark Robson]

Cover art now available for viewing on amazon.co.uk. See: http://www.amazon.co.uk/exec/obidos/...623040-1545248

What do you think? I like it. I think Geoff Taylor has done me proud again.