How else do I say...?

[allmywires]

They've split up to investigate the town, and the bodies are quite long dead, though she does hush one of them later thinking they're in danger so I may need to rethink that.

I've fixed it now, though, just by referring to them by name. There are only two of them, after all. thank you all though.

[Mouse]

Originally Posted by allmywires

She's with two men, and she's saying it because they've just come across an empty town, and in the town square are piles of dead bodies. So calling attention to something dangerous, I would say.

I am all up inside your head, feeding on your brain. I so got that from that one line. *spooky music* I swear I'm psychic.

Anyway, my suggestion was going to be drop the 'oh' and refer to them both by name but, damnit, you've beaten me to it.

[allmywires]

Originally Posted by Mouse

I am all up inside your head, feeding on your brain. I so got that from that one line. *spooky music* I swear I'm psychic.

Anyway, my suggestion was going to be drop the 'oh' and refer to them both by name but, damnit, you've beaten me to it.

OK, I'm scared now...

[Galacticdefender]

We need quick fire questions again

[allmywires]

Originally Posted by Galacticdefender

We need quick fire questions again

I miss it

[David Evil Overlord]

We could always have a new Quick Fire Questions thread, and once it becomes too humungous we could humanely euthanise it and clone a new one.

[TheDustyZebra]

Originally Posted by allmywires

What's a better way of sayings guys? As in,

They don't speak in thees and thous, mediaeval style, but they aren't exactly 21st century either.

Personally, I say "guys", as in "you guys", but if I were back in Georgia (US Southern state, not Russian one), it would be "y'all".

Does she have a couch upon which to swoon immediately following the exclamation?

[Mouse]

My head's gone. How do I say 'bringer of justice?' As is, what's another word for 'bringer' or is there a phrase or something I'm missing?

[Jammill Khursheed]

DELIVERER of Justice perhaps... sounds cooler, especially if they are the one meeting out the punishments a'la judge dredd...


Jammill

[The Judge]

Nemesis. Or Judge. The two are very similar.


Mouse, what's the sentence, so we can see what would fit best?

[Mouse]

Deliverer sounds good...

This is the sentence: He had been, they informed him, most helpful and he suspected that when the murderer was caught it would largely be because of his help. He wondered if he could add it to his C.V. ‘Bringer of Justice.’

[The Judge]

Sounds fine to me in that context -- suitably grandiose while totally meaningless. (NB He's technically a bringer to justice, not of, but that doesn't sound nearly as good...)

While I'm here, that "suspected" sounds a little weak as does the "largely" -- if this is ego-boy, won't he know? And I think I'd put a colon after CV -- make the title stand out nice and shiny.

[Mouse]

I did think it was 'to' but thought it sounded a bit weird. I'll keep it as 'of' if it's still sort of ok?

And yeah, it's him! I'll change it to know. Ta.

[TheDustyZebra]

I think "Bringer of Justice" is perfect for this!

[Mouse]

Awesome, it stays. Ta!