Advice needed: Love scene

[Precision Grace]

Originally Posted by Boneman

And the name of your youth is?

That doesn't even make sense.

[Boneman]

Well, it's a very oblique double entendre........... Would work better if you were male, I'spose.....

[daisybee]

Originally Posted by anuran's angel

They're having sex. What point could I possibly wish to convey through something like that? That they love each other? Yes, that's been established earlier. I just need this to happen because she's meant to fall pregnant later on.



Any suggestions of such "like minded authors"?

Well if you just want to establish they are sexually active in order to set up a pregnancy, that can be conveyed loads of ways without an actual scene.

Sorry- I am not sure what style of fantasy you are writing so it's a little hard to suggest but I will have a think for you and post should any occur to me.

[anuran's angel]

Well, it's difficult to say what kind of fantasy it is exactly. I prefer to be vague about the period. However, it's definately not a modern setting. My Prologue and Chapter one are posted in the critiques forum. They should give you an idea.

[ctg]

I personally believe that a sex scene should have a long agonising build up by giving readers subliminal hints that it's coming. When you move to write, you should only write the scene up to the point that it becomes obvious to the reader that a copulation is going to take a place. Otherwise, you might as well be writing for the Harlequin series or male magazines.

To write a sex scene, make sure that you create tension in the midst of the dance between two characters longing for each other. Let them experience the nervousness of newness. Make them unsure of how to proceed. Don’t be afraid to leave the reader hanging. It’s quite possible that it will be important to change scenes before relating that the promised sex did indeed take place. However you do it though, make sure the scene is tense from start to finish. Readers appreciate the slow-moving thrill ride as much as your significant other does on the rare occasion when you work your mojo with a slow hand.

[Boneman]

By ctg

Readers appreciate the slow-moving thrill ride as much as your significant other does on the rare occasion when you work your mojo with a slow hand.

Erm.........don't want to say what I think about that last sentence.... hopefully it's just a double entendre.......

[flynx]

Originally Posted by anuran's angel

They're having sex. What point could I possibly wish to convey through something like that?

I take it you haven't read very much erotica.

You'd be surprised about how much goes on in a sex scene apart from the sex.

You'll also probably be surprised that it's possible to write an erotic scene without any hint of actual sex.

fight scenes, horse racing, debates, parties, the workplace, and sex scenes are all about relationships.

If you're simply describing the mechanics then you're not writing a sex scene.

[Boneman]

If you're simply describing the mechanics then you're not writing a sex scene.

Dammit! You mean 'wham, bang, thank you ma'am' isn't good enough??

[TheEndIsNigh]

You could always use the old favourite of the girl being 'mysteriously' pregnant before the story starts.

Since this seems to be a SFF tale you could throw in a few donkeys shepherds and a spaceship or two with silver suited, hover booted aliens for good measure.

Oh....

...that may have been done before!!!


Damnation.


Probably.