From Yesterday: Scene One (In script form)

[Scarlett Eclipse]

Ok, I've been working on this for awhile and I had this real crappy first scene so I rewrote it and I still don't know about it. So thoughts please would be really nice. It's something I'm still sort of working on so don't be too harsh on the grammar (please).

Scene One

EXT. SMALL HOUSE WITH FENCE-NOON

GABRIEL, 23, he has messy auburn hair, green eyes and is extremely pale, stands outside the fence looking at the house. He reaches out grabbing the latch to the gate, but hesitates to open it. Taking in a deep breath, he pushes it open and walks toward the front door.

INT. FRONT YARD

There is a small cement staircase that leads to the door, walking up onto it; he stops.

GABRIEL POV: looks at a little garden to the left. A small stone angel sits in it holding onto a circle stone with small handprints. Above the handprints it says: Gabriel, in colorful marbles.

He looks back at the door raising a fist ready to knock on it. But instead, he lowers his hand and turns away.

Gabriel makes it to the steps when the door abruptly flies open. WILLIAM, 57, he is tall, has short white hair and green eyes, comes bursting onto the small front porch. He stands there looking at Gabriel’s back.

WILLIAM:
I’m not interested in any religion, and I
Won’t buy anything. Take us off your list
and (shouts) LEAVE US ALONE!

Gabriel does not move.

WILLIAM:
Turn around so I can see you take our names
off your list.

Slowly, Gabriel turns around to look at him. The color leaves William’s face as he falls back against the side of the house.

GABRIEL:
(whispers)
Hi dad.

End Scene