New Poetry Thread

[daisybee]

Mith-Thanks a lot!! If you were interested check out my homepage. Lots of my poems are there.

Jon, I love the fact that you write poems to reveal the depth of your world, and to add to the texture of your work. You have a lot of creativity stored in those words, epic scenes and glimpses of cultures and places entirely of your own making. I hope to see more of your writing-be wary of posting entire poems if they are indeed for a book though, excerpts perhaps? I guess along the lines of critiques-be aware to apply similar rules to your poetry if you want it published. (which I hope you do!)

Maj-you write very personal revealing poems! I enjoyed both your poems, but the torn shirt image was my favourite, I think we can all associate with objects/items of clothing having a much deeper meaning..so it got me.

Peace.

[Majimaune]

Thanks. I quite liked that torn shirt thing as well. It came from me just wearing a slightly ripped shirt. Kinda takes the magic out of it when you know that doesn't it?

[Mithridelle]

Ah! The things that inspire you - love it!

[Majimaune]

Originally Posted by Mithridelle

Ah! The things that inspire you - love it!

Thank you Mithy

This one was written the other morning when I was bored. I live in a rough area where there is often shouts or screams from somewhere around my house at least once a week.

A Night of Peace

Tonight,
If the moon danced on high,
And the stars shone so bright,
Maybe there would be peace.

Peace for the world,
A night without gunfire,
Without the screams of children
as they struggle to get away
from those that would harm them.

A night without violence,
Would be a night in Heaven.

[Mithridelle]

So accurately describing the woeful state our planet has fallen to. The things that can make people smile are far too few. It is an envoking piece from my perspective and very a thoughtful poem.
Do continue your wonderful work, won't you Geoff? It does make this one delighted to see another of your works posted.

[Jon_Sauve123]

Forever Land


Blue crystals floating in an edgeless dream,

Their sparkling life seems to seem,

Like an endless ocean, time without seam.

A beautiful shiver on the waves,

Icy rivers and lonely caves,

Deep and boundless, a world's grave.

A flat and blinding shimmer across the sand,

A pure soul comes to stand,

Together with me, in this forever land.

[Majimaune]

Originally Posted by Mithridelle

So accurately describing the woeful state our planet has fallen to. The things that can make people smile are far too few. It is an envoking piece from my perspective and very a thoughtful poem.
Do continue your wonderful work, won't you Geoff? It does make this one delighted to see another of your works posted.

If you want, I'll send you a link where I put poetry up very regularly.


Jon, I like it. I do. There is just one little thing about it that annoys me but I can't think of it (how annoying). When I think of it I will put it up.

Here is some more of my work...Um I think this one is good.

When He...

When he looked
into her eyes
He fell into a place of bliss,
Warm and secure.

When he heard
her speak his name
which had never been told,
A layer,
A cloak of fear
fell away.

When he touched
he hand though
by accident.
He felt warm,
Safe.

When he did
nothing at all,
lying cold in his bed
he thought of her
and she made
him feel
good about himself,
Placed a smile
on his lips.

I know this,
Because I am he.



Um heres another that I actually like, I don't remember if I put it up on here though *checks* I can't see it.

Strangers, Kisses and Secrets

I passed someone today
And I thought about her story.
Who she is,
Who she was,
Where she came from.

Her eyes followed me,
And then our eyes met.
Something passed between us.
She blew me a kiss
Then disappeared forever.

What was she thinking about?
Why did I catch her attention?
I'm nothing special.
The answer to Life's great mysteries,
Is the greatest secret of all...

[Jon_Sauve123]

Originally Posted by Majimaune

If you want, I'll send you a link where I put poetry up very regularly.


Jon, I like it. I do. There is just one little thing about it that annoys me but I can't think of it (how annoying). When I think of it I will put it up.

Maybe it's because it doesn't actually make sense? I wrote it when I was half asleep, after just listening to a song. I wanted to put my emotions after it into words. If I recall correctly the song was Bliss by Muse. Such a beautiful song. it always stirs up feelings. It reminds me of a girl I once knew, who I really liked or even love, and I'll never know how she felt toward me.

And I liked both of the poems. They also reminded me of her, but in a good way.

[chrispenycate]

This might be a poem. I don't know what elseit could be

To a small human being who has recently decided (with some persuasion from a pair of forceps) to join us in this vale of tears.

Grandmothers
The wisdom that augments, completes, instinctive care
Experience is handed down since tribal time
And evolutionary foundations imply
A rigid bond.

Grandfathers
Lacking the mitochondrial connections, bear
A lesser burden than their wives enshrine
The mono-generational link may well supply
And correspond.

Granduncles
We've paddled in the gene pool, never wet our hair
Shorn of responsibility by lack of direct line
We can give cuddles too, or hum a lullabye
Nor go beyond

[Majimaune]

Chrispy, I like it. Made me laugh.

I have put up a few more on deviantArt if anyone wishes to check them out there. I just reserve the best for you though.

My Muse

You are my inspiration,
My life,
I only live for you.

Little do you know it,
I think of you always.
Trying to concerntrate on
other things happening around.
Unsuccessful.

So I write,
Ignoring everything around me,
Hoping that my thoughts
of you
Will leave me be.




The Easy Way

How do you
stop whispering to yourself,
Telling yourself,
That you will never
be good enough for her,
Or him,
Or them to actually care about you.

No matter what you say
to yourself,
To others,
There will always be those
who stick with you through anything.

Their love,
Unconditional.

I'd be there for you,
listening to what you have to say.
If only I could...

If only I could.
If only there was another way,
A way where actions
speak louder than words,
A way where no one
would get hurt.

I'd take that way,
I know you would too.

[Small Face]

If I could ride a butterfly
I’d ride a better butterfly
Than even buttercups have seen
Or butter-churns have dreamt of.

If I could hide a spider
I would hide a spider
Somewhere here
Or there
But not forgetting
Which it was
Or whether it had wandered off.

And so on butterflies I ride
With spiders hidden left and right
I raise a smile and tip my hat
And this is this and that is that.


[Composed by Small Face after a large think.]

[Majimaune]

Um this took me about half an hour to write last night, got me almost to midnight, until I was mildly happy with it.

When I

I dream a thousand days,
I stay a thousand nights.
I walk a thousand ways,
I fight a thousand fights.

Thinking,
When I should be feeling.
Feeling,
When I should be thinking.

Waiting,
When I should be moving.
Seeing,
When I should be blind.

Doing everything wrong.

Have I received
The wrong message?

Have you not seen mine?
Was I not clear enough?

I feel I want to love you,
With my heart,
My mind,
My body,
Every part of me.

But why do I worry
that you don't
feel the same about me,
When it seems
So much that you do.

[Jon_Sauve123]

What does my soul seek to borrow?

It traveled down a bright lit road, and then,

Randomly it came to sorrow.

The sky darkened to the darkest black,

And launched upon my soul, an attack,

And killed and hurt with things I lack.

My soul cried and screamed ‘no more!’

But there was not less, and always more,

And my soul was nothing but dark and sore.

I huddled them close, those purer than me,

I closed their eyes so they could not see,

The bleakness beyond, stretching for eternity.

I whispered to them, as we admired the view,

“Don’t fall over, whatever you do,

“But if you do, I will catch you.”

[Urlik]

Originally Posted by Majimaune

Jon, I like it. I do. There is just one little thing about it that annoys me but I can't think of it (how annoying). When I think of it I will put it up.

is it because the rhyme is over 3 lines rather than 2?
unusual rhyming schemes can be an aquired taste.

[Jon_Sauve123]

A cold wind blows, and an old door grows, enter what you thought was gone,

Things that should have never been, songs that never have been sung,

Dark corners that the light has never seen, things that never will be green,

Walkways of the dead and forgotten, ominous and deranged,

Death and pain, when the new souls all arrange.

Burning thoughts and memories, torching words and trees,

Blinding things and making them strange, the debt never paid,

More thoughts initialize, scorching through black halls of the past,

When a door opens, you begin to see that all is gone,

You don’t look much like yourself, when the light turns on.