Interesting turn of events... since you wrote this last year, it would have fit in Aeryn's POV, but now it sounds more like John's POV.
Good job... I
love shippy fic (just look at mine
) On the criticism side, you might want to rewrite this keeping your verb tenses consistant. It'll read easier. And it doesn't matter that you wrote this last year... as a future fic (and a very shippy one at that), it'll always have a place on the FS bboards.
Love your ideas, so keep on writing! I know I am!
I just wrote a fic inspired by a song, too... hope you enjoy it. :blush: