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Old 8th August 2007, 07:21 PM   #1 (permalink)
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A poem

Here is a poem I constructed in a good ten minutes. Tell me if it's any good.





It glides across the sullen sky, alone,
unknowing of its destination, simply flying
and it weeps accordingly, for it has sown
its reckoning and damnation on its own.

Nothing and nobody shall ever be
able to comprehend its lonely cry,
the ways its inflection of voice decree
its melancholic sadness in an azure sky.

Forever and ever does it roam,
starved of love and affection.
Never to regain a place back home,
where it might find guidance and direction.

Never will it know the peace inherent of death,
for it will always remain, festering like a sore
and in pain it will ache and forever give breath
to the loneliness, to the depths of its very core.

It glides across the sullen sky, alone,
unknowing of its destination, simply flying
and it weeps accordingly, for it has sown
its reckoning and damnation on its own.
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Old 8th August 2007, 07:26 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Re: A poem

not too bad considering i dont really read poetry, thought the rymes were gd
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Old 27th July 2008, 06:09 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Re: A poem

I don't usually prefer rhymed poetry but I liked it, especially the story.
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