Star-trek: S-31

[Section-31]

(O.O.C Hi all, this will by my first post here...as you may have guessed from my user name...I love the Controversal "Section 31" this will be an ongoing Post by Post Series Concerning Section 31 Post "Nemesis" as well as flashbacks ect. (expect covert crossovers)...And deal with the "behind the scenes" activities of S-31, The Tal Shiar, ect....and beyond. Collaberation would be welcomed, e-mail me a Bio if you wish to join in...it will firstly be set in the year 2379...shortly after the events depected in "Nemesis"so...here goes.....any Questions feel free to E-mail me)STAR-TREK: S-31The Cloaked Unofficial Federation StarShip WRAITH, actually a modified Difiant class Warship, engeenered and maintained by Section 31, mantained its orbit above the Homeworld of the Romulan Star Empire since its arrival just over a Week ago....A lone figure stood in the darkened Observation Deck, reading from a personal Log....It read:Romulus Had plunged into Civil war Since the events surounding Shinzon's, the ill fated Praetor of The Empire, Demise....The Reman controlled Senate believed the Tal Shiar were responsible for there"hero's" Demise, and the Destruction of the Scimitar....the Remans ultimate weapon....The Militia Obviously supported the Tal Shiar and the Old Ragime...finding it hard to accept, the fact that the Empire was now under the Control of Former Slaves...Thusly, the Capital plunged into Chaos....those who favored the Old Regime...and those previously hard done by in the Empire who Supported the Current one....Federation Intel, sudgested by Section 31 states that Prior to the Scimitar's Destruction...The Tal Shiar had optained Detailed Scans of the Weapon....they were rumered to have backwards engineered a new one...with some improvements...The Pro-Reman Forces who retained the Original Scematics were also rumered to have constructed a new Scimitar....a power-struggle was underway. If alowed to continue these weapons would not only threatin the Romulan Empire....but the Entire Gamma Quadrent, and more besides.Agent Taylor Jones read the Intel before him and Sighed, taking his Gase off the 3 inch screen of his Personal Log and Gased through the Porthole to the Planet below."...Romulans..." He Grimmised"I would have expected this kind of Stupidity from the Klingons"Taylor..or Jones, as he prefered to be Called resumed reading the LogSection 31 has tasked your Team with the Following mission: Optain the plans, for both sides current generation of the Weapon....replace them with falsefied plans, which havebeen made available in your WRAITHS computer Banks..."Boy these missions just seem to get easier and easier" he remarked Scarcasticly "but thats why they recruited me...did'nt have much choice concidering...Ah hell its eighter this or back to the Void, certain Death is a Small price to pay for freedom" he Mused ....As always Taylor your Team are operating outside of Federation Teritory..and Knollage... you Officially do not Exist within the Federation..."yeah...yeah"the Future of the Federation rests in your hands"heh...just don't expect any parades right?" scoffed Jones Jones Tossed the Logon the Table and made his way briskly to the Door....He was dressed in the Section's Offical, if it could be refered to as such, all black Uniform.. he sported 3 day old Stubble and ear length, parted to the Right Blond hair...He walked down the Narrow corridor and into the cramped Sick-Bay.."Need a Romulan Prostetic" he stated very matter of factly"...on the Chair" replied the Gruff Tollaxion Medic assined to the Ship, Jones complied with a Sigh"...may sting a little..." stated the Medic as he injected Jones with an anistetic...realistic Prostetics require Skin grafting"...yeeeooww!!!" cried Jones"...for Tollaxion's" said the Medic continuing his Sentance"Jeez..." replied Jones"really smarts, for Humans" grinned the Medic"thanks for the warning" retorted Jones as the Anistetic kicked in... (will continue later)

[Section-31]

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(O.O.C Hi all, this will by my first post here...as you may have guessed from my user name...I love the Controversal "Section 31" this will be an ongoing Post by Post Series Concerning Section 31 Post "Nemesis" as well as flashbacks ect. (expect covert crossovers)...And deal with the "behind the scenes" activities of S-31, The Tal Shiar, ect....and beyond. Collaberation would be welcomed, e-mail me a Bio if you wish to join in...it will firstly be set in the year 2379...shortly after the events depected in "Nemesis" so...here goes.....any Questions feel free to E-mail me)


STAR-TREK: S-31


The Cloaked Unofficial Federation StarShip WRAITH, actually a modified Difiant class Warship, engeenered and maintained by Section 31, mantained its orbit above the Homeworld of the Romulan Star Empire since its arrival just over a Week ago....


A lone figure stood in the darkened Observation Deck, reading from a personal Log....It read:


Romulus Had plunged into Civil war Since the events surounding Shinzon's, the ill fated Praetor of The Empire, Demise....The Reman controlled Senate believed the Tal Shiar were responsible for there"hero's" Demise, and the Destruction of the Scimitar....the Remans ultimate weapon....


The Militia Obviously supported the Tal Shiar and the Old Ragime...finding it hard to accept, the fact that the Empire was now under the Control of Former Slaves...Thusly, the Capital plunged into Chaos....


those who favored the Old Regime...and those previously hard done by in the Empire who Supported the Current one....


Federation Intel, sudgested by Section 31 states that Prior to the Scimitar's Destruction...The Tal Shiar had optained Detailed Scans of the Weapon....they were rumered to have backwards engineered a new one...with some improvements...


The Pro-Reman Forces who retained the Original Scematics were also rumered to have constructed a new Scimitar....a power-struggle was underway.


If alowed to continue these weapons would not only threatin the Romulan Empire....but the Entire Gamma Quadrent, and more besides.


Agent Taylor Jones read the Intel before him and Sighed, taking his Gase off the 3 inch screen of his Personal Log and Gased through the Porthole to the Planet below.


"...Romulans..." He Grimmised


"I would have expected this kind of Stupidity from the Klingons"Taylor..or Jones, as he prefered to be Called resumed reading the Log


Section 31 has tasked your Team with the Following mission: Optain the plans, for both sides current generation of the Weapon....replace them with falsefied plans, which have been made available in your WRAITHS computer Banks...


"Boy these missions just seem to get easier and easier" he remarked Scarcasticly


"but thats why they recruited me...did'nt have much choice concidering...Ah hell its eighter this or back to the Void, certain Death is a Small price to pay for freedom" he Mused


....As always Taylor your Team are operating outside of Federation Teritory..... you Officially do not Exist within the Federation...


"yeah...yeah"the Future of the Federation rests in your hands


"heh...just don't expect any parades right?" scoffed Jones Jones Tossed the Log on the Table and made his way briskly to the Door....He was dressed in the Section's Offical, if it could be refered to as such, all black Uniform.. he sported 3 day old Stubble and ear length, parted to the Right Blond hair...


He walked down the Narrow corridor and into the cramped Sick-Bay..


"Need a Romulan Prostetic" he stated very matter of factly


"...on the Chair" replied the Gruff Tollaxion Medic assined to the Ship, Jones complied with a Sigh


"...may sting a little..." stated the Medic as he injected Jones with an anistetic...realistic Prostetics require Skin grafting


"...yeeeooww!!!" cried Jones


"...for Tollaxion's" said the Medic continuing his Sentance


"Jeez..." replied Jones


"really smarts, for Humans" grinned the Medic


"thanks for the warning" retorted Jones as the Anistetic kicked in... (will continue later)

[ray gower]

If you save the story as html from your word processor, then copy and paste from that you should find it will automatically include a line space between paragraphs

As for the story; There is not a lot to comment on, apart from the usual: Watch the capitalisation and Spellcheck is my friend.
As this is a story in its own right and you are introducing new characters, it could use a little more description e.g. What is Jones: Human, green pygmy, hologram etc?
Does he move at all, have habbits?
None of this is of huge importance yet with so little on the board and can be fed in as the story progresses, but it will make it read smoother