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Old 14th July 2007, 06:12 AM   #151 (permalink)
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The rope around her neck was coarse, cheap stuff; her red-rimmed eyes searched the crowd for any sign of him, in vain.
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Old 14th July 2007, 08:29 AM   #152 (permalink)
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His mother died on a Monday.
First thing that came to mind when I saw this was "Maman died today." Of course, I'm just that breed of nerd that would make connections like that.

A few first lines from things I'm currently working on.

(1)
Jim Gartner stared at a blank computer screen, wondering where science had gone wrong.

(2)
Man is the only creature with the awareness of his oncoming death, and he is condemned by it.

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He was coming home late on a Thursday night; problem was, he had died last Tuesday. His wife was going to be in a snit.

Okay, two lines on that last one. I'm a cheater.
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Old 14th July 2007, 10:06 AM   #153 (permalink)
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Okay, two lines on that last one. I'm a cheater.
Far from the only one....

So who's Maman? (I'm the breed of nerd that has to know what you were talking about...)

Oh, and I really like (2).
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Old 14th July 2007, 10:37 AM   #154 (permalink)
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Far from the only one....

So who's Maman? (I'm the breed of nerd that has to know what you were talking about...)

Oh, and I really like (2).
Thanks.

It's the opening line to The Stranger by Albert Camus.

Maman died today. Or yesterday maybe, I don’t know. I got a telegram from the home: “Mother deceased. Funeral tomorrow. Faithfully yours.” That doesn’t mean anything. Maybe it was yesterday.

It was written in French. I understand that initially there was some squabbling over the translation for "maman" (the French word for mother), do they make it "mother" or "mom" - one more affectionate than the other - and at present translators settled on maman. If you've ever heard the song "Killing an Arab" by The Cure, it's based off a scene in there. Anyway, useless info, sorry.

It's a pretty incredible book. But two notes on it: one, really, the most interesting part of the book is the last few pages; and two, The Fall is his best work if you ask me, though less famous than The Stranger.

And to really help it bite, the last line: "For everything to be consummated, for me to feel less alone, I had only to wish that there be a large crowd of spectators the day of my execution and that they greet me with cries of hate."
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Old 15th July 2007, 06:11 PM   #155 (permalink)
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Footsteps Echo down the winding metal corridor,
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Old 15th July 2007, 06:20 PM   #156 (permalink)
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Too bad Death isn't the end.I've lived one life,filled to the brim with good stuff,and that's enough for me.I don't want to be bothered with another one
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Old 16th July 2007, 08:20 AM   #157 (permalink)
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People generally portray cannibals as almost subhuman savages, so Dan really enjoyed having guests over for dinner.
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Old 19th July 2007, 08:49 PM   #158 (permalink)
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"Ask me again if I've completed the first line," Kane enquired of his wife lying motionless at his feet in a pool of blood.
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Old 19th July 2007, 09:47 PM   #159 (permalink)
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A flash of light was all the warning he had before it hit him.
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Old 22nd July 2007, 05:46 PM   #160 (permalink)
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A short while ago, in a galaxy very close to here...
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Old 22nd July 2007, 06:31 PM   #161 (permalink)
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Everyone says that they see their life flash before their eyes just before they die, but all I saw was that face.
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The cry, when it came, was much closer than he expected.
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I used to believe that you only live once, but then I died and life became interesting at last.
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I used to believe I wanted an interesting life, but I've since learned to stop wishing.
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The concrete wall rushed at me at about 90 miles per hour
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