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Old 17th March 2003, 02:15 PM   #1 (permalink)
sweet reazor blade kisses
 
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Cool careless wind

careless wind

in the wind i hear the voices
in the wind you cry to me
in the wind i am calm
in the wind i am careless i am free
out at sea i am surounded by water
up on the mountian i am at peace with all and one
but not all is lost,
in the wind you find me
in the wind i am crying out to you
in the wind im frozen
down to the bottom of hell is were i have been
in the wind i shall rise higher than any kite
in the wind we find each other
in the wind we will love till the end of time
time is frozen when you cant her the voices in the wind
when you stop loving all that youve loved you are the tree that fights the wind
with out roots you will colaps and die
in pain sorrow and anger rising up in you blinding you from what you know
to what you need
from all that you loved
is blown away in the wind
when the time is frozen
when you stoped loveing all youve ever loved,

COPY RITE
2003
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Old 17th March 2003, 07:22 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Wow buksie that is beautiful. Sad but beautiful.
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Old 18th March 2003, 02:02 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Very touching . It is sad, yes ,but I can relate.
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Old 18th March 2003, 02:38 PM   #4 (permalink)
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ooo thankies
asmiley and 13jay
i love the smiley asmiley

dajavu??

anyway
glad you like it and i dont know how i rot it, ot just flowed till it stoped

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