Do You Write Poetry?

[HardScienceFan]

Thanks Hairymunky,now I can write Phonetic Scottish!
Ben,Scottophile extraordinaire

[dustinzgirl]

Originally Posted by HardScienceFan

Thanks Hairymunky,now I can write Phonetic Scottish!
Ben,Scottophile extraordinaire

Why do I suddenly have this image of you in leather garb, raping and pillaging the nearest traditional scottish village?

[hairymunky]

Originally Posted by dustinzgirl

Why do I suddenly have this image of you in leather garb, raping and pillaging the nearest traditional scottish village?

You may take our lives, but you'll never take my... cat

[HardScienceFan]

Originally Posted by dustinzgirl

Why do I suddenly have this image of you in leather garb, raping and pillaging the nearest traditional scottish village?

Beats me Dusty.I'd like to know also.
I am certainly not the raping and pillaging type.
More the "let's have a cuppa,and discuss the weather" type,actually

[dustinzgirl]

Originally Posted by HardScienceFan

Beats me Dusty.I'd like to know also.
I am certainly not the raping and pillaging type.
More the "let's have a cuppa,and discuss the weather" type,actually

That's what everyone says before they try to eat your liver.

[scalem X]

now back on topic:


raid the village!
pillage! pillage!
grab their gold
and grab their furs
this time we take
no prisoners

[daisybee]

Called Stranger I suppose...

Sunny day
Busy park
Kids play
Dogs bark
Stressed mum
Bored kid
"Don't wander"
He did
Sand pit
Swing, slide
In bush
To hide
From mum
Calling name
Laughs now
Funny game
Dark car
Strange man
To sweets
He ran
"Get in
Have fun"
Boy refuses
"Want mum"
Man smiles
Shakes head
Boy missing
Presumed dead

[HardScienceFan]

HI,Daisybee.
Very good,and very sinister,almost horrorpoetry.
What inspired it?
it's almost a cautionary tale

[daisybee]

Thanks Ben! I wrote it years ago to be honest, I used to take my sisters to the park and there was a weird guy that freaked us all out..so i wrote a poem to scare them stupid.

[HardScienceFan]

Originally Posted by daisybee

Thanks Ben! I wrote it years ago to be honest, I used to take my sisters to the park and there was a weird guy that freaked us all out..so i wrote a poem to scare them stupid.

Probably succeeded too
Compared to that,Stephen King reads like Barbara Cartland

[daisybee]

It's late at night
And all the talking's done
The lies all told
The dreams undone

The time all spent
The smiles now faded
Our youths a wishlist
Eyes now jaded

Hopes abandoned
The truth embraced
The years engraved
Upon your face

These bodies tired
Needing sleep
This bond we share
So sweet so deep

I hear you sigh
So far away
And ache inside
For yesterday

This life so full
Of love and fears
As much with laughter
As with tears

The love we've shared
Has pulled us through
I am just me
You are just you

In the dark
I'm close to tears
I hear your heart
It calms my fears

Our bodies withered
Chances taken
Choices made
So much forsaken

Your skin now fragile
Soft to touch
Your shallow breathing
Says too much

So close now
To our ending
Children grown
And time unbending

Marching on
And sweeping past
How could our lives
Go by so fast?

As your breathing
Starts to waver
And living
Turns into a labour

This love inside
Spreads warmth throughout
I am so grateful
You had no doubt

That we would end
Our days together
Wrapped in these arms
I've known forever

I look
Just one last time
I am so lucky
You were mine

I can do romantic too. (Although I'd rather not, but enjoy anyway!)

[HardScienceFan]

I was well and truly moved after reading that DB.
Once again,words fail me.
Awesome,but that doesn't come too close.
very emotive,in any case.
Direct,heart to heart
Ben

[Leisha]

Ditto. That was beautiful yet sad. Very poetic and moving. Well done.

[dustinzgirl]

Daisybee,

Both of your poems are really good. It has a great rhythm, decent rhyme couplets, and provokes images. And "Stranger" is exactly why I have drilled into my kids head "SCREAM AND RUN."

[Frank menser]

Certainly a study in contrasts those two.

~Frank