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pamie · 22nd July 2001, 09:17 PM

LOL @ you guys

Well I am in the clear then as I have finished my fic (the last piece

) and will post it later.
Im not greatly happy about some parts of it but I am sure you guys will tell me if I have done anything wrong

Pam

pamie · 22nd July 2001, 10:00 PM

Well here you go then guys.....

Part Four

General Hammond walked into his office where Jack, Jacob and now Teal’c sat.
“We have a go on your rescue mission Jack.....” he was interrupted by a knock at the door.
“Come”
“Sir we have just received a radio message from the Tok’ra, they are going to arrive here in five minutes”
“Thank you airman” replied the general
“The Tok’ra? What do they want? Have they not done enough damage!” asked Jack.
“Im not sure....I don’t even know if the high council know that im here!” Jacob looked to Jack
Jack just shrugged his shoulders “Gets me”
“Perhaps they have information on Major Cater” spoke up Teal’c

“Off world gate activation” boomed a voice from the gate room.
Jack was the first out of the Generals office closely followed by the rest of the men.
They arrived in the gate room just as the seventh chevron had engaged.
“Do we have a code” asked the general
“Yes sir its the Tok’ra”
“Then open that iris”
After a short while Garsha walked through the gate.
Jack and Jacob met her at the foot of the ramp.
“Garsha! What are you doing here”
“Jacob we have some news for you, its about your daughter!”
-------------------------------

Sam awoke to find herself in what she thought was a coffin but she then realized that it was in fact a sarcophagus.
It was then it all come flooding back to her, she remembered that Apophis had shot her with a staff weapon, shot her dead she thought but then someone must have put her in this thing, but who?
It was the that the doors to the room opened and Martouf walked in.
“Samantha I’m glad you are awake”
“Stay away from me” she cried jumping out of the sarcophagus and backing herself against a wall.
She was aware that there was nowhere to run and that she had no weapons to defend herself either.
“Samantha...........” Was all that Martouf managed to say before he was cut off by Apophis who had just walked into the room with two jaffa.
“I knew I should have not trusted you, for your betrayal you shall watch your Tau’ri friend die before you are subject to my toture” he boomed at Martouf.
“Betrayal?” asked a confused Sam “So it was you that put me in the sarcophus, but why?”
“That is enough!” Apophis raised his hand and looked towards Sam.
Sam knew that he would use his hand device on her and this time she might not be so lucky. She took a deep breath and waited for it.
“No.......” Martouf jumped infront of Sam and took the full force of the blast.
Sam looked on confused, Martouf had just saved her life. Before she had a chance to think Apophis once again turned to her.
“An unfortunate mistake but now it will be your turn”
“I don’t think so” shouted Jack O’Neill as he pointed his zat gun at Apophis.
Sam looked over and saw that behind him was Teal’c and Jacob also holding zat guns.
“Fire” commanded Jack
They all fired at the same time taking out the two jaffa and Apophis.
Sam let out the breath that she was holding and knelt down by Martouf
“He’s alive” she said with relief in her voice.
“So are you major” Jack said also sounding relived.
“We should start to make our way back to the stargate before Apophis awakes” spoke up Teal’c
“He’s right, Teal’c help Jacob with Martouf and Sam and I will meet you outside in a few minutes”
Teal’c raised one of his eyebrows but did not question him.
Jacob walked to wards Sam
“Come on Sam” he said
She replied by giving him a hug “Dad I’m so glad to see you”
“Same here”

A few minutes later they met up with Jack outside not far from the stargate.
“Jack what have you been doing?” asked Jacob
“We should cover ourselves behind those rocks” said Jack pointing to a cluster of rocks not far from the gate.
None of then questioned him and did as he said. When they were all safe Jack pressed a button on the device he had in his hand. They all realized at the same moment that Jack must have been planting C4 on the ship. As they all covered their heads they heard the mothership blow up. As they looked up all they could now see were flames where the ship once stood.
“Well that should teach him” was all that Jack said “Now lets get ourselves home”
“Before we go sir, how did you know I was here and can anybody tell me what has been going on?”
“It’s a long story Major but you see Jacob turned up and told us that you had not met him on the planet as arranged, then Garsha paid us a visit to tell us what had really been going on, then.....”
“So where does Martouf fit in to all of this?” she interrupted
“Ok so I don’t tell a story so well but Martouf was playing at being a spy”
“Sam the Tok’ra council found out that you and I were to meet and he had planned to capturer you, Martouf offered to act as a spy in Apophis’s ranks so that you would not get hurt” explained Jacob
“But why did they not just warn us what was going to happen?”
“As then Apophis would have knew that we had someone on the inside, the high council denied permission for Martuof to take on the mission but he did it anyway”
“So all those things he said to me were just an act”
“What sort of.........” Jack was interrupted by Sam pushing passed him.
“Excuse me...” Jack also turned to see what Sam had seen.
“Martuof!” she exclaimed “You are ok!”
“I am Samantha” he replied getting to his feet.
She walked up to him and hugged him
“Thank you for saving my life”
“I was not sure you would forgive me.” he said a little surprised at the show of affection
Sam smiled and pulled away “You saved my life I think that was a start”
“Ok kids let break this up and lets get home” Jack said with a small frown on his face.

--------------------------------

General Hammond was waiting at the base of the ramp. He felt a little nervous as he always did when he was waiting for one of his teams to come back home. Sometimes he felt like he was a father waiting up to see if his children all get home safe and sound.
SG-1, Martouf and Jacob all walked through the gate.
The general gave a sigh of relief to see that they had all returned safe and well.
“Welcome home people” he said with a smile “de briefing will be in one hour”
“Actually George, Martouf and I should get going” replied Jacob
“Very well Jacob” General Hammond walked forward and shook Jacob’s hand “Thank you Jacob for all your help”
“Dad do you have to leave so soon?”
“Afraid so Sam”
Sam gave her father another hug while Jack and Teal’c walked away to give her some room.
“Thanks dad and we should do that father/daughter thing soon but maybe you should come here next time”
“I will Sam and we will do it soon I promise”
Sam looked over to Martouf, he walked towards her “Thank you also” she said giving him another hug “I wish you didn’t have to leave so soon”
“So do I Samantha but you could always come with me”
She pulled back and looked into his eyes “ eeerrrrr what?” she asked confused
“you must know how I feel about you Samantha”
Sam looked over to see Jack staring at her and Martouf.
Looking back to him she said “You know I can’t”
“I know” he replied also looking over at Jack.
“Martouf we need to go” said Jacob

“Off world activation” boomed a voice from the control room.
As the gate started to turn the General ran to the control room. Everyone waited until the gate was activated and General Hammond asked the question “Do we have a code?”
“We do sir it’s SG-5 with Dr. Jackson”
“Open the iris”

Daniel Jackson and SG-5 came through the gate. Daniel stopped short when he saw the scene before him of Jack, Teal’c, Sam, Jacob and Martouf.
“Have I missed something” he asked
“you haven’t” replied Jack.
Sam looked Jack in the eyes, smiled and turned away.

* Meanwhile On PX 5678*

Apophis stumbles out of the burning wreckage and collapses on the ground.

The End

skydiver · 22nd July 2001, 11:40 PM

it was a nice ending pamie. and trust me, sometimes it's harder to wrap them up than it is to get em started.

good job.

imported_Bee · 23rd July 2001, 01:42 AM

It was a good fic Pamie with a nice ending. And I agree with Skydiver, the ending is sometimes the hardest part to write.

jsc · 23rd July 2001, 06:52 AM

Good ending... and Apophis has more lives than SG-1!

pamie · 23rd July 2001, 06:58 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by skydiver
it was a nice ending pamie. and trust me, sometimes it's harder to wrap them up than it is to get em started.

good job.

Glad its not just me then.
It only took around an hours to write the other parts but the ending bit took about two or three days......I'm still not that happy with it.
But anyway I would just like to thank you guys for all the encouragement with my first fic and hope to be soon writting another

BTW When I first started to write the story I was never going to make Marty bad I had written him in as the good guy. It was not until Nic and some of you guys were saying "wow Marty as the bad guy" that the thought had even entered my head. I thought it would make a better story so I changed it

So thanks again and a special thanks to Nic

Annette · 23rd July 2001, 09:30 AM

Thanx Pamie.

Really enjoyed that. Whens the next one? (haha)

annette

peachy · 23rd July 2001, 10:55 AM

that was great pamie, i know what you mean about endings
i find it hard getting an ending as well, but that was really
good

can't wait to read your next one...peachy

nic · 23rd July 2001, 01:44 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by pamie
So thanks again and a special thanks to Nic

Aww shucks, don't be silly!:blush:

Great wrap up Pamie.
Poor Marty though, will he ever get the girl?

I can't wait till your next piece of fiction!

*applauds*

imported_Bee · 23rd July 2001, 05:44 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by pamie
BTW When I first started to write the story I was never going to make Marty bad I had written him in as the good guy. It was not until Nic and some of you guys were saying "wow Marty as the bad guy" that the thought had even entered my head. I thought it would make a better story so I changed it
So thanks again and a special thanks to Nic

That happens to me a lot too. Someone will pop in with something and it just fits

That is the one of the good things about the people on this site. They give terrific advice and suggestions

pamie · 23rd July 2001, 08:20 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by nic

Aww shucks, don't be silly!:blush:

Great wrap up Pamie.
Poor Marty though, will he ever get the girl?
I can't wait till your next piece of fiction!

*applauds*

Nah Marty will never get the girl in any of my fanfics coz he is all mine *evil laughter*:evil:

Anyway you are so right Bee it is one of the best things about a site like this, you can take on others ideas and suggestions.

imported_Sandman · 23rd July 2001, 10:18 PM

That was a GREAT ending, Pamie. Excellent. very enjoyable.:rolly2:

nic · 24th July 2001, 07:00 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by pamie

Nah Marty will never get the girl in any of my fanfics coz he is all mine *evil laughter*:evil:

Didn't your mother teach you how to share? Now give him to me!

imported_Bee · 25th July 2001, 12:22 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by nic

Didn't your mother teach you how to share? Now give him to me!

Now, girls don't fight! You can go get your own Marty in the NID clone thread. No fighting and you can costum him however you like

nic · 25th July 2001, 02:53 PM

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Originally posted by Bee
and you can costum him however you like

Even in a tutu and cowboy hat?

22nd July 2001, 09:17 PM	#61 (permalink)
pamie Space Monkey! Join Date: Feb 2001 Location: South coast of the UK Posts: 3,091	LOL @ you guys Well I am in the clear then as I have finished my fic (the last piece ) and will post it later. Im not greatly happy about some parts of it but I am sure you guys will tell me if I have done anything wrong Pam

22nd July 2001, 10:00 PM	#62 (permalink)
pamie Space Monkey! Join Date: Feb 2001 Location: South coast of the UK Posts: 3,091	Well here you go then guys..... Part Four General Hammond walked into his office where Jack, Jacob and now Teal’c sat. “We have a go on your rescue mission Jack.....” he was interrupted by a knock at the door. “Come” “Sir we have just received a radio message from the Tok’ra, they are going to arrive here in five minutes” “Thank you airman” replied the general “The Tok’ra? What do they want? Have they not done enough damage!” asked Jack. “Im not sure....I don’t even know if the high council know that im here!” Jacob looked to Jack Jack just shrugged his shoulders “Gets me” “Perhaps they have information on Major Cater” spoke up Teal’c “Off world gate activation” boomed a voice from the gate room. Jack was the first out of the Generals office closely followed by the rest of the men. They arrived in the gate room just as the seventh chevron had engaged. “Do we have a code” asked the general “Yes sir its the Tok’ra” “Then open that iris” After a short while Garsha walked through the gate. Jack and Jacob met her at the foot of the ramp. “Garsha! What are you doing here” “Jacob we have some news for you, its about your daughter!” ------------------------------- Sam awoke to find herself in what she thought was a coffin but she then realized that it was in fact a sarcophagus. It was then it all come flooding back to her, she remembered that Apophis had shot her with a staff weapon, shot her dead she thought but then someone must have put her in this thing, but who? It was the that the doors to the room opened and Martouf walked in. “Samantha I’m glad you are awake” “Stay away from me” she cried jumping out of the sarcophagus and backing herself against a wall. She was aware that there was nowhere to run and that she had no weapons to defend herself either. “Samantha...........” Was all that Martouf managed to say before he was cut off by Apophis who had just walked into the room with two jaffa. “I knew I should have not trusted you, for your betrayal you shall watch your Tau’ri friend die before you are subject to my toture” he boomed at Martouf. “Betrayal?” asked a confused Sam “So it was you that put me in the sarcophus, but why?” “That is enough!” Apophis raised his hand and looked towards Sam. Sam knew that he would use his hand device on her and this time she might not be so lucky. She took a deep breath and waited for it. “No.......” Martouf jumped infront of Sam and took the full force of the blast. Sam looked on confused, Martouf had just saved her life. Before she had a chance to think Apophis once again turned to her. “An unfortunate mistake but now it will be your turn” “I don’t think so” shouted Jack O’Neill as he pointed his zat gun at Apophis. Sam looked over and saw that behind him was Teal’c and Jacob also holding zat guns. “Fire” commanded Jack They all fired at the same time taking out the two jaffa and Apophis. Sam let out the breath that she was holding and knelt down by Martouf “He’s alive” she said with relief in her voice. “So are you major” Jack said also sounding relived. “We should start to make our way back to the stargate before Apophis awakes” spoke up Teal’c “He’s right, Teal’c help Jacob with Martouf and Sam and I will meet you outside in a few minutes” Teal’c raised one of his eyebrows but did not question him. Jacob walked to wards Sam “Come on Sam” he said She replied by giving him a hug “Dad I’m so glad to see you” “Same here” A few minutes later they met up with Jack outside not far from the stargate. “Jack what have you been doing?” asked Jacob “We should cover ourselves behind those rocks” said Jack pointing to a cluster of rocks not far from the gate. None of then questioned him and did as he said. When they were all safe Jack pressed a button on the device he had in his hand. They all realized at the same moment that Jack must have been planting C4 on the ship. As they all covered their heads they heard the mothership blow up. As they looked up all they could now see were flames where the ship once stood. “Well that should teach him” was all that Jack said “Now lets get ourselves home” “Before we go sir, how did you know I was here and can anybody tell me what has been going on?” “It’s a long story Major but you see Jacob turned up and told us that you had not met him on the planet as arranged, then Garsha paid us a visit to tell us what had really been going on, then.....” “So where does Martouf fit in to all of this?” she interrupted “Ok so I don’t tell a story so well but Martouf was playing at being a spy” “Sam the Tok’ra council found out that you and I were to meet and he had planned to capturer you, Martouf offered to act as a spy in Apophis’s ranks so that you would not get hurt” explained Jacob “But why did they not just warn us what was going to happen?” “As then Apophis would have knew that we had someone on the inside, the high council denied permission for Martuof to take on the mission but he did it anyway” “So all those things he said to me were just an act” “What sort of.........” Jack was interrupted by Sam pushing passed him. “Excuse me...” Jack also turned to see what Sam had seen. “Martuof!” she exclaimed “You are ok!” “I am Samantha” he replied getting to his feet. She walked up to him and hugged him “Thank you for saving my life” “I was not sure you would forgive me.” he said a little surprised at the show of affection Sam smiled and pulled away “You saved my life I think that was a start” “Ok kids let break this up and lets get home” Jack said with a small frown on his face. -------------------------------- General Hammond was waiting at the base of the ramp. He felt a little nervous as he always did when he was waiting for one of his teams to come back home. Sometimes he felt like he was a father waiting up to see if his children all get home safe and sound. SG-1, Martouf and Jacob all walked through the gate. The general gave a sigh of relief to see that they had all returned safe and well. “Welcome home people” he said with a smile “de briefing will be in one hour” “Actually George, Martouf and I should get going” replied Jacob “Very well Jacob” General Hammond walked forward and shook Jacob’s hand “Thank you Jacob for all your help” “Dad do you have to leave so soon?” “Afraid so Sam” Sam gave her father another hug while Jack and Teal’c walked away to give her some room. “Thanks dad and we should do that father/daughter thing soon but maybe you should come here next time” “I will Sam and we will do it soon I promise” Sam looked over to Martouf, he walked towards her “Thank you also” she said giving him another hug “I wish you didn’t have to leave so soon” “So do I Samantha but you could always come with me” She pulled back and looked into his eyes “ eeerrrrr what?” she asked confused “you must know how I feel about you Samantha” Sam looked over to see Jack staring at her and Martouf. Looking back to him she said “You know I can’t” “I know” he replied also looking over at Jack. “Martouf we need to go” said Jacob “Off world activation” boomed a voice from the control room. As the gate started to turn the General ran to the control room. Everyone waited until the gate was activated and General Hammond asked the question “Do we have a code?” “We do sir it’s SG-5 with Dr. Jackson” “Open the iris” Daniel Jackson and SG-5 came through the gate. Daniel stopped short when he saw the scene before him of Jack, Teal’c, Sam, Jacob and Martouf. “Have I missed something” he asked “you haven’t” replied Jack. Sam looked Jack in the eyes, smiled and turned away. * Meanwhile On PX 5678* Apophis stumbles out of the burning wreckage and collapses on the ground. The End

22nd July 2001, 11:40 PM	#63 (permalink)
skydiver Trivia Goddess Join Date: Sep 2000 Location: topeka, ks, usa- 7 1/2 hours due east of Cheyenne Mountain Posts: 2,856	it was a nice ending pamie. and trust me, sometimes it's harder to wrap them up than it is to get em started. good job.

23rd July 2001, 01:42 AM	#64 (permalink)
imported_Bee Who likes to play w/Legos Join Date: May 2001 Location: Missouri Posts: 1,766	It was a good fic Pamie with a nice ending. And I agree with Skydiver, the ending is sometimes the hardest part to write.

23rd July 2001, 06:52 AM	#65 (permalink)
jsc God Like Member Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Los Angeles, California,U.S.A. Posts: 4,352	Good ending... and Apophis has more lives than SG-1!

23rd July 2001, 09:30 AM	#67 (permalink)
Annette This is Star - my honey!! Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: West Midlands Posts: 5,944	Thanx Pamie. Really enjoyed that. Whens the next one? (haha) annette

23rd July 2001, 10:55 AM	#68 (permalink)
peachy Daniels Beloved Join Date: Dec 2000 Location: i commute between cheyenne mountain & scotland Posts: 2,952	that was great pamie, i know what you mean about endings i find it hard getting an ending as well, but that was really good can't wait to read your next one...peachy

23rd July 2001, 10:18 PM	#72 (permalink)
imported_Sandman confused Join Date: Oct 2000 Location: San Diego, California Posts: 1,222	That was a GREAT ending, Pamie. Excellent. very enjoyable.:rolly2: