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adele.s · 28th June 2001, 06:47 AM

Title: Good Graces

Season: 1
Spoilers for: first season up to and including Politics

Category: a bit angsty, missing episode/scene(s)... and if anyone reading this story can help me figure out other categories to list here, please pm or email me (adele@caltech.edu)!

Summary: Set after But For the Grace of God and parts of Politics. After the political decision to mothball the stargate, but before the last two teams return, the SGC has an unexpected visitor. How many Dr. Jacksons can one SGC handle?

No pairings, and rated PG-13 I would guess, for some language and vague references to events in Hathor.

Notes: This introduces characters from alternate reality via the mirror, but _could_ have happened within the existing television series story arc without disturbing the course of the existing show, once I finish writing its sequel, States of Grace

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Hey, folks, I've found two wonderful beta readers, and have removed this draft version to point people instead to the latest version of the story...

It's linked in at my Abydan Archive site... http://www.its.caltech.edu/~adele/sg-1/#adeles_fanfic

Thanks to everyone here at ASciFi.com's boards for your positive encouragement to keep writing!!
-- Adele

adele.s · 28th June 2001, 06:51 AM

As I mentioned above, I've removed this draft version in favor of the updated version archived at my website...

Thanks again, everyone!
-- Adele

jsc · 28th June 2001, 07:53 AM

adele.s,
That is a very good fic. I really enjoyed it and the difficulity and thesmypathy that the Danielle and Daniel Jacksons had with and for each other. It was very realistic and cannon. I also enjoyed the humor of the situation... especially when the Next Dr. Jackson came through! Liked Hammond's reaction to that....
Keep on writing! But watch out for the ascifi.com MOB! If we take you unaware you will be chained to a very heavy ball and forced to write fan fiction to keep us supplied.

Yes, I think Heliopolis should get this story. Ask Skydiver if she would like to Beta (make suggestions about the story for changes et cetera) it for you!

You have caught the characters very well. Keep on writing! And more for this, also. But if you end it at the end of part two it is complete.
Thanks again for a good read!

imported_Sandman · 28th June 2001, 08:29 AM

That was great.
You wrote a fine story that fit in well with the series timeline and you kept the characters true.
I liked the ending, too--they just kept coming and coming....
You should definately write more, you're good at it.:rolly2:

KatDonovan · 28th June 2001, 01:39 PM

Adele S.

That was truly excellent!

I really enjoyed reading it. Jsc was right about the mob tho, better watch your step, or you'll be dragging a ball and chain behind you:lol:

That's the highest form of flattery on here tho, being hunted by the mob

Keep up the good work

adele.s · 28th June 2001, 03:22 PM

Now that I've slept a bit (and gotten my morning coffee...), I've reread this and corrected the incredibly glaring spelling mistakes, and brought my more creative phonetic spellings into line with the word spellings from the official MGM website. I think that's most of the simple/silly errors, but if anyone spots any other typos or inconsistencies in the text above, please let me know!

Oh, and about that mob... I tend to write in marathon chunks, and then take long breaks. As long as the mob appreciates my marathons, I'm happy to be pestered in my breaks to get back to it!

Oh, and if anyone familiar with the anime Ranma 1/2 is curious about my very first fanfic (which I haven't edited for typos, unfortunately), take a look at http://www.alumni.caltech.edu/~adele...crifices.html.

Thanks again; I'm so glad to have found a friendly little corner of the web to spin this tale into before putting it anywhere else!
-- Adele

peachy · 28th June 2001, 03:59 PM

that was great adele loved it, it had hurt, sadness, and humour in
it, keep up the fic-ing they'll be no rest for you now, cause the
*Mob* know your name now:evil:...peachy

Gemsong · 28th June 2001, 08:40 PM

Welcome to our crazy little corner of the galaxy

The fanfic mob has now found you. They are merciless. They are evil. They have no patience. They have whips. They have hounds....

In other words, they have you now.

That was a great story. Really good. You did a really good job with Danielle. And the alternate realities look like it was really well thought out. I love that sort of thing.

So when's the next part? :evil:

:evil:

nic · 29th June 2001, 10:00 AM

Great piece of fan fic Adele!
Do you do a lot of writing?

Anyway, keep it up!

Nicola x x

adele.s · 30th June 2001, 03:58 AM

Thanks to the positive encouragement from this forum, I've built a webpage to house my budding SG-1 obsession... Adele's Abydan Archive.

http://www.its.caltech.edu/~adele/sg-1/

I'll be posting updates to this fic, and further writings, there, and posting links rather than the big chunks o' text here from now on.

Thanks so much!
-- Adele

jsc · 30th June 2001, 06:03 AM

Let me see, adele.s has had time to set up a Web site and work and post here... MORE FIC MORE FIC! Demanding aren't we!

Gemsong · 30th June 2001, 10:38 AM

Yep, we want more fic from you.

Beware Jsc. She's the leader and has the biggest whip.

adele.s · 30th June 2001, 01:58 PM

Yup, that's me: fic, work, web. Plenty of coffee, not much sleep!

After seeing Peachy's ascfi.MOB fic, I think I've got a better idea of what's pounding on the blast doors, though...

I hear you, out there! Don't fret. I'm hoping to figure out the last bits of characterization for the remaining parts of States of Grace today. It's actually tougher figuring out how three different Daniels will interact than it was figuring out Danielle and Daniel... and I still haven't settled on which person's mind to spend the most time in with this part.

But have no fear, it will be done soon!
-- Adele

imported_Bee · 1st July 2001, 02:09 AM

Great job Adele S.

And the more Daniel's the merrier as far as I'm concerned

jsc · 2nd July 2001, 10:50 AM

Gosh, I just hope they can ALL get to their own universes without a mix up! This is a really fun situation! I don't dare say take your time.... Not with the mob pounding after me!:evil:

28th June 2001, 06:47 AM	#1 (permalink)
adele.s Member Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 68	Newbie fanfic: Good Graces (feedback needed!) Title: Good Graces Season: 1 Spoilers for: first season up to and including Politics Category: a bit angsty, missing episode/scene(s)... and if anyone reading this story can help me figure out other categories to list here, please pm or email me (adele@caltech.edu)! Summary: Set after But For the Grace of God and parts of Politics. After the political decision to mothball the stargate, but before the last two teams return, the SGC has an unexpected visitor. How many Dr. Jacksons can one SGC handle? No pairings, and rated PG-13 I would guess, for some language and vague references to events in Hathor. Notes: This introduces characters from alternate reality via the mirror, but _could_ have happened within the existing television series story arc without disturbing the course of the existing show, once I finish writing its sequel, States of Grace --- --- --- --- --- --- --- --- --- --- --- --- Hey, folks, I've found two wonderful beta readers, and have removed this draft version to point people instead to the latest version of the story... It's linked in at my Abydan Archive site... http://www.its.caltech.edu/~adele/sg-1/#adeles_fanfic Thanks to everyone here at ASciFi.com's boards for your positive encouragement to keep writing!! -- Adele

28th June 2001, 06:51 AM	#2 (permalink)
adele.s Member Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 68	Good Graces, part 2 As I mentioned above, I've removed this draft version in favor of the updated version archived at my website... Thanks again, everyone! -- Adele

28th June 2001, 07:53 AM	#3 (permalink)
jsc God Like Member Join Date: Aug 2000 Posts: 4,352	GREAT! Congratulations on your first fic here! adele.s, That is a very good fic. I really enjoyed it and the difficulity and thesmypathy that the Danielle and Daniel Jacksons had with and for each other. It was very realistic and cannon. I also enjoyed the humor of the situation... especially when the Next Dr. Jackson came through! Liked Hammond's reaction to that.... Keep on writing! But watch out for the ascifi.com MOB! If we take you unaware you will be chained to a very heavy ball and forced to write fan fiction to keep us supplied. Yes, I think Heliopolis should get this story. Ask Skydiver if she would like to Beta (make suggestions about the story for changes et cetera) it for you! You have caught the characters very well. Keep on writing! And more for this, also. But if you end it at the end of part two it is complete. Thanks again for a good read!

28th June 2001, 03:22 PM	#6 (permalink)
adele.s Member Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 68	Thanks for reading, folks! Now that I've slept a bit (and gotten my morning coffee...), I've reread this and corrected the incredibly glaring spelling mistakes, and brought my more creative phonetic spellings into line with the word spellings from the official MGM website. I think that's most of the simple/silly errors, but if anyone spots any other typos or inconsistencies in the text above, please let me know! Oh, and about that mob... I tend to write in marathon chunks, and then take long breaks. As long as the mob appreciates my marathons, I'm happy to be pestered in my breaks to get back to it! Oh, and if anyone familiar with the anime Ranma 1/2 is curious about my very first fanfic (which I haven't edited for typos, unfortunately), take a look at http://www.alumni.caltech.edu/~adele...crifices.html. Thanks again; I'm so glad to have found a friendly little corner of the web to spin this tale into before putting it anywhere else! -- Adele

30th June 2001, 03:58 AM	#10 (permalink)
adele.s Member Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 68	Bit the bullet, made a webpage... Thanks to the positive encouragement from this forum, I've built a webpage to house my budding SG-1 obsession... Adele's Abydan Archive. http://www.its.caltech.edu/~adele/sg-1/ I'll be posting updates to this fic, and further writings, there, and posting links rather than the big chunks o' text here from now on. Thanks so much! -- Adele

28th June 2001, 08:29 AM	#4 (permalink)
imported_Sandman confused Join Date: Oct 2000 Posts: 1,222	That was great. You wrote a fine story that fit in well with the series timeline and you kept the characters true. I liked the ending, too--they just kept coming and coming.... You should definately write more, you're good at it.:rolly2:

28th June 2001, 01:39 PM	#5 (permalink)
KatDonovan Slainte` Join Date: Feb 2001 Posts: 1,608	Adele S. That was truly excellent! I really enjoyed reading it. Jsc was right about the mob tho, better watch your step, or you'll be dragging a ball and chain behind you:lol: That's the highest form of flattery on here tho, being hunted by the mob Keep up the good work

28th June 2001, 03:59 PM	#7 (permalink)
peachy Daniels Beloved Join Date: Dec 2000 Posts: 2,954	that was great adele loved it, it had hurt, sadness, and humour in it, keep up the fic-ing they'll be no rest for you now, cause the Mob know your name now:evil:...peachy

28th June 2001, 08:40 PM	#8 (permalink)
Gemsong The Spawn Queen Join Date: Mar 2001 Posts: 2,379	Welcome to our crazy little corner of the galaxy The fanfic mob has now found you. They are merciless. They are evil. They have no patience. They have whips. They have hounds.... In other words, they have you now. That was a great story. Really good. You did a really good job with Danielle. And the alternate realities look like it was really well thought out. I love that sort of thing. So when's the next part? :evil: :evil:

29th June 2001, 10:00 AM	#9 (permalink)
nic Stomping Turnips Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 2,629	Great piece of fan fic Adele! Do you do a lot of writing? Anyway, keep it up! Nicola x x

30th June 2001, 06:03 AM	#11 (permalink)
jsc God Like Member Join Date: Aug 2000 Posts: 4,352	Let me see, adele.s has had time to set up a Web site and work and post here... MORE FIC MORE FIC! Demanding aren't we!

30th June 2001, 10:38 AM	#12 (permalink)
Gemsong The Spawn Queen Join Date: Mar 2001 Posts: 2,379	Yep, we want more fic from you. Beware Jsc. She's the leader and has the biggest whip.

30th June 2001, 01:58 PM	#13 (permalink)
adele.s Member Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 68	*grin!* Yup, that's me: fic, work, web. Plenty of coffee, not much sleep! After seeing Peachy's ascfi.MOB fic, I think I've got a better idea of what's pounding on the blast doors, though... I hear you, out there! Don't fret. I'm hoping to figure out the last bits of characterization for the remaining parts of States of Grace today. It's actually tougher figuring out how three different Daniels will interact than it was figuring out Danielle and Daniel... and I still haven't settled on which person's mind to spend the most time in with this part. But have no fear, it will be done soon! -- Adele

1st July 2001, 02:09 AM	#14 (permalink)
imported_Bee Who likes to play w/Legos Join Date: May 2001 Posts: 1,766	Great job Adele S. And the more Daniel's the merrier as far as I'm concerned

2nd July 2001, 10:50 AM	#15 (permalink)
jsc God Like Member Join Date: Aug 2000 Posts: 4,352	Gosh, I just hope they can ALL get to their own universes without a mix up! This is a really fun situation! I don't dare say take your time.... Not with the mob pounding after me!:evil: