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| Dark Angel Dark Angel is a futuristic series about Max, a genetically engineered soldier who escaped from her military past and has been trying to build a new life in \"post pulse\" Seattle. |
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10th July 2001, 11:06 PM
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| Part seven Max's perspective I ran up to Logan. I know it is kind of weird calling a teacher by hiist name, but i felt that he was more like a friend then a teacher. He didn't act all bossy and strict like the othet teachers, and was really patient with me in my math class. I am realy bad at it, and most teachers dont have a attentio span to put up with me, but he does very well, and i call him by his first name. I saw him looking at me funny as i approached him. I was thinking abut rescheduling one of our tutoring sessions, because I had another class to study for. Somehow i feel starnge talking to him,yet i dont know why. It is so weird, and sudenly my mind can't stop thinking about dumping Zack....Logan had told me that I have very good potential and that i shouldn't never let anyone stand in the way of my dreams. AS i was thinking about all this, I now noticed why LOgan was satring at me like he had seen a ghost. Zack was coming towards us in the opposite direction and he didn't look to happy."Logan---hey i um...", I started to feel my hands get sweaty andmy knees felt like jello., as he looked at me with a concerned expression. Why was i nervous? why couldn't i stop thinking about him? i mean he was nice, and smart, and stuff, but why was isuddenly feeling like i was going to be carsick or something?what was wrong with me. "yes..Max..what was it you were saying.." i looked at his blue eyes,and suddenly fely my tongue get dry. my mind went blank.I droped my books on the floor like a clumsy fool.Logan dropped to his knees to help me with my books. I tried not to make eye contact with him. AS he helped me pick up my stuff I felt myself turning bright red. "idiot..idit..idiot.." i felt a voice in my head saying . "here.i think this is al of them...yi sure have a heavy load.Mx..' he looked into my eyes,and as his hand gently brushed past mine to hand me the book i had dropped i felttingles run down my arm.For amoment we just sat there like a bunch of statues in silence. "HEY..WHAT THE HELL!" Logan andI quickly climbed to our feet an dhe pretended to be watching the clock on the wall, while i made circles in the ground with my sneaker. Zack walked right in between us. "am i interrupting something here? " lOgan's face hardened. "what?no? i was jsut trying to tell Max that i won't havetime to tutor her anymore."he bit his lower lip. I felt my heart ache like a thousand knives had been thrown right through it.I looked at him angrily. "what? how in the world am i supposed to pass my math class? I can't cope with the other methods the other teacher's give me. !" Logan turned his head andlooked at thclock on the wall again. Hewouldn't even look at me. " I have a lot of things to do, and i won't be able to have time to tutor you. Maybe you cold try iton your own for once or smething." I tryed to make eye contact with him,but he wouldn't even look at me. " thanks for nothing! i thought you were supposed to be my friend and my teacher-but i guess iwas wrong. you want me to fail my math class...I HATE YOU!" with that i turned on my heel and walked away before Zack stopped me adn grabbed me by the arm. "max honey"<he said looking at Logan,"i am so glad i ran into you."i smiled at him, and tryed to avoid Logan's jeaous stare. I then didsomething i never thought i would do in a milion years..."you wana go with me to prom Max, i was just trhinking..i mean i know you dont liek those things ,but," i stopped Zack mid-sentace by grabbing his face close to mine and kissing him. i thenbroke away from him as soon as teh bell rang....noticing Logan staring at me with a stunned expression,and Zack a pleased smile on his face. review.... |
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14th July 2001, 04:58 PM
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|  i love how my warped mind works! yes..im being very wicked right now. i have to keep everyone on their toes, so im giving the story a twist. It will be like a will they or wont they,along with certain other suprises!!!!! p.s. i passed my tests..so i can relax now.YEA!!!! i sure made Zack into an ass,huh? well now everyone in the story is going to be on 24 hr pms,including logan.it wll be quite funny.and veryone is going to be pissing everyone else off!!!!!:evil: RoXy:evil: |
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16th July 2001, 10:40 PM
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|  part eight--- Logan's perspective ****normal time frame: 2010. I yawned. It was 9 am in the morning and Max still had not awaken. i wondered if she had come down with something. I had spent teh entire night watching her sleep while i sat next to her in a recliner.it sort of hurt my back,and my eyes had gotten tired, but i was worried about her. I felt so annoyed with myself for waiting until teh end of the party to decide to confront max with my suprise. Unfortuanetly by that time, she had fallen asleep. Maybe i shld have done it at the party, but if she reacted any differently then i h oped, it might cause embarrassment,and would be kind of incompassionatr on my part. I figured it would have been better to make it privte so i could see her reaction. well i guess i would just make it tonight,at dinner. i would invite her to a nice restaurant ad tell her their. making it at home might have the risk of being bothered by my computer,or any other distractions. Just for tonight i wanted it to be jsut me and Max an dto forget the rest of the world. if tha was possible. Max now awoke as i climbed to my feet.I watched her slowly open her eyes and look at me. Her eyes looked really tired and worn out. "logan, what was it you wanted to tell me? was it something important?you seemed really anxious yesterday.im so sorry i fell asleep."I looked into Max's eyes,and pulled a strand of hair out of her face. It is ok,Max.im going to make you some breakfeast first.then you can go back to relaxing and we can discuss this later. ." Max looked wounded for amoment. "i thouht you wanted to tell me right away." I held my breath.i hated keeping things from Max. it hurt me like crazy,but i couldn't just rush into what i had to tell her. I saw Max look down at thefloor.she looked like she wanted to cry. she was probably thinking that i wa signoring her!!! uh.i must have looked really bad jsut right now. keeping something from her like that. I hurried into the kitchen to amke some breakfeast fo rher.AS i scooped up some eggs onto a frying pan,i wonderd what must have been going through Max right now. she must have been thinking something else. when i told her it had to wait,she looked like she was expecting something else. Max probably thought -oh my gosh-no wonder sh ewas so sad jsut right now!! i had to tell her it wasn't what she was thinking. i had been hesitant to touch her last night,and slightly far away,but only because i was not sure how she would react. sh eprobably thoght i was going to break up with her or something. I stopped what i was doing and marched back to the rom. I heard a huge bang.i gaspedwhen as i opened the door Max lay on the floor.I shook Max,trying to wake her up,but she had no pulse."max!!max!!i shook her,but she had no reaction. I dialed 911 and panicked as i slammed down the phone. I phoned Zack,johndy,and Tinga,and they said they would meet me at the hospital.I watche dthe paramedics pull her awa and take her in. As i got to the hospital i stood beside Max and ran with teh paramedics to her rrom in the hosptal. I was pushe daway by several docyors who told me they needed room to work. I nbanged on the window to be let in,but they had several doctors pull me away,and sit me down in the waiting room. i placed my head in my hands and sobbed. i saw nothing just darkness. I felt a hand on my shoulder.I looked up.It was Zack. zack had a concerned look in his eyes. he sat down next to me. I had never really liked Zack,but for some reason Zack was being nice to me now. Zack had changed over the past few months,and he seemed more friendly. He placed ahand on my shoulder,and patted me on the back."she will be alright.Max has to be strong.she loves you.." Ipunched my fist into the wall. Tinga and teh other x-5's all sat next to me. they all leaned their heads on my shoulder and calmed me down. "here,take my hand."said zack.I squeezed his hand,and me and the others just sat their in the waiting room praying. please review my spelling sucks,im sorry!my computer is being really annoying today! |
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18th July 2001, 04:18 PM
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|  part nine--- time warp : 2001 Tinga's perspective I rolled my eyes as I watched Max throwing herself at Zack. Zack certainly seeme dto be enjoying himself. I noticed how Max suddenly had strted wearing trashy clothes, and acting liek a slut around Zack. i knew she was trying o piss someone else off. i mean Logan tells her h eno longer wnats to tutor her,and suddenly she is acting like a slut, and all over Zack? the last i heard she wanted to break up with Zack. im going to make that girl pay. Zack is mine, and i will mke her sorry for inteferring with my plans.Max should have dumped Zack already,and since she hasn't im going to try a little of my magic on him.I watched max excuse herself to go use the ladie's room. Zack tehn paused ,and walkedin my direction. i had been sitting at theusual spot all of us sit at in the cafeteria. it waslunchtime, and i was strving. whenim hungry i eat anything,even the nasty cafeteria food.belch. Zack slid down next o me. I gave him a concerned look. zack placed his hands through his hair. "taht girl, is seriously up to something." i sneered."you think? Zack,she only started paying attention to you,when mr. math professor ignored her." zack bit his lip. "actaly i told him to back -off.heknew i could get him fired easily,sinc i knowalot of people." i cracked my neck.' well it just seems weird to me. I mean if nothing was happening,shouldn't he have defended his honor?but the very fact that he stopped right when you suggested it,means he is guilty of something." Zack grinned. "exactly. And see how fast Max transferred into mr.normal's math class?sh sure was in a hurry to get away from logan.and how she practically jumped my bones? like she was trying to get him to notice." I placed a hand on Zack's shoulder. "it seems to me,like she is making a fool out of you. I mean the whoel school was talking about her and tht math professor, and now when he stops tutoring her,she acts desperate to get your atention? she is playing you Zack. you aren't going to let her get away with how she has made you look like afool ?' zack sighed. "of course not.i did invite her to prom after all..so perhpswe can makesomething happen over there...she wont know wht hit her.....max will be sorry she ever messed with us.she will get triple dumped by him,me, her gang,and out on the street..ah that girl wont know what hit her." I leaned forward and and snuck a kiss from Zack. i was unaware of a pair of brown eyes watching us from the distance. part ten. original cindy's perspective i watched tinga and max making out in the cafeteria, and pull away as soon as Max exited the bathroom. I had overheard their whole conversation.i was stunned. I had been helping Max out in mr.Normal's math class all this time. I had no idea that she ahd maybe been involved with the math teacher who calle dhimself Logan. Max had came to be a good friend of mine. I knew taht Max was in a ton of trouble. I worked my way to the cafeteria table zack,max,and tinga were sitting at. I knew zack and tinga hadn't seen me.they were to busy amking out to notice. "hey max." i said cheerfully. Max looked up at me. sh ewas about ready to offer me a seat when Zack and tinga gave her a annoyed look. Max looked away. I grew angry.max jsut stared at her food,while Zack gave me a disgusted look."hey sydney,whatever your name is,dont you belong with the other penny pinchers?" i rolled my eyes. "it is cindy, and i thought that trash belonged in the garbage can.hmm i didnt know apile of **** was 6ft high." Zack got up,but i saw tinga flash him a look to sit down. I saw her get up, and look me up and down. "why dont you get lost,before i rearrange your face." i pulled her long hair and smacke dher face into the lunch table. i leaned over her,and whispered in her ear. 'i know what game your playing,and don't think i wont tell Max ,you backstabbing bitch." I let go of her hair. sh eraised herself up,and stared at me with frightened yes.she grabbed my arm and puled me asude. "you didn't see anything,cindy.got it? Max wouyld never believe you anyway.' i pulled my arm away."watch your back,tinga. you never know who might be waiting to take you down." the bell rang and everyone ran off to their lockers. Tinga grunted as i stepped on her foot.hard.i followed Max running offto the library. i stepped in front of her to stop her. she wouldn't even look at me."max, what i syour problem?" Max jerked herself around."you.ok.why did you hve to follow me at lunchtime. i told you taht no one is supposed to be seem with me and zack other then his own crew.you know that." i felt really hurt by her brush-off. "look,i heard some things,and i thought you should know.i know im not supposed to tal to you with them around,but i thought you should know." Max crossed her arms."know what? " "well your loyal best friend and boyfriend are hooking up behind your back,and planning on making you look stupid at the prom." max gre angry." how dare you say that about my best friend and boyfriend. you know,you sound jsut like-'she stoppe dherself. i held my breath.'logan?" max's eyes grew wide."what? where on earth did you gte that idea?" i took max's arm. ' come on Max, there is a rumor going around that you and logan had something going on,but zack found out and that is why you transferred to a different math class." max avoided eye contact with me." i transferred because,he stopped being agod teacher.he lno longer had time to tutor me." i yawned." please max.! did he tell you the reason he didn't? did he mention how zack threatened to get him fired if he continued to tutor you?' max's eyes now looked liek they had been filled with rage. "how would you know? you weren't there?" "i heard him and tinga talking. it sure seemed obvious to me logan must have liked you.i mean to suddenly stop when Zack threatens him? if he was just teaching,wouldn't he have defended himself,and continued to prove Zack wrong?" Max's eyes now looked watery. she looked liek she wanted to cry. I watched her turn around and face the wall. " you don't know anything Cindy. i mean you think that you can jsut assume things about me>well your wrong. i admit sometimes zack and tinga are jerks, but so what. that is the way they are,they wouldn't intentionally try to hurt me.and logan is astupid teacher who thiks he knows everything..........' her voice started to crack. I thought i heard her sob.i turned max around. I could see tears fill up in her eyes. "if logan is just a teacher,then how come talking about him is causing you to turn into aleaky facet?" max wipoed her eyes. "look thanks for your help with math.im caught up now,so i dont need your help anymore.you dont need to talk to me anymore." I glared at Max. "max im your friend! i actually care about wha happens to you. if you care about you know who,why dont you just tell him.the hell with everyone else. Zack makes you miserable." Max broke down into tears. "you would never understand. teachers dont date their students.nogirl dumps zack ,or even trys to doublecross him. i could never bring him down. and the one man i -----oh forget it. i have to go!' max ran off into the bathroom her head in her hands. i tryed to run after her,but then realized that there was only one other person who could help her now. |
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19th July 2001, 03:50 PM
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| my bad....i think it was more like they were flirting or something,but li i said, my computer sucks so sometimes i write down the wrong things.grrrrrrrrrrrrr......well im glad you liked it. here is the next part: part eleven regular time frame:2010 max's perspective I awoke to find myself in ahospital. what in teh world? i had no idea why iwas here for. was i imaging this? I thought i was crackingup or something, when i suddenly saw lOgan come into the room,and hisexpresson was full of concern. he looked lik he hadn't slept for days, his eyes were red and puffy, and he was a mess. I thinkhe was wearing clothes that had slept in. When he saw me open my eyes,he smiled. "mAx,im glad your ok. I thought i had lost you there for a second." I breathed slowly, feeling like my lung were going to explode. I just remembered hi ssuprise he had wanted to tell me about. i wonderd if he would tell me about this moment. i stared up at him. "so what was the suprise you wanted me to hear of?" logan now grew silent. "um..well. this is very important. but i cant tell you jsut yet. it woudn't be right. i want to wait until tonight over dinner,in a nice restaurant. so that t would be more appropriate." i could feel my mouth go dry. h was going to break up with me. Iknew it. he was probably letting me down easily. i knew that hisother relationships had failed miserably,but i thought he would have at least given us achance.h ewas probably waiting until iwas feeling better,because he didn't want me to pass out. that must have explained why he hardly wanted to be around me at my birthday party,why h ekept changing th subject! and then ho he wanted to wait until everyone else was gone. I couldn't believe that he thought he could give up on me so easily. "Max,listen i really think we need to talk.i don't think we can hold off on this amoment longer.if i don't get this off my chest tonigt,i won't be able to live with myself." i tryed to avoid contact with him. I couldn't even look at him. i felt like such an idiot. why had i let myself fall forhim so hard? i wish i didn't have all these feelings.that made it eve worse. Logan tookmy hand in his. I hope you won't hate me for doing this...i mean i know you have probbaly never had this happen before liek thsi,and i dont know how yo will react. i jsut hope you dont get angry at me. whoknows?maybe you will react the opposite way!" i decided that i had to be strong here. I would go and meet him for dinner. And I would beat him to the punchline. i was not going to end up looking stupid. i would do it first,that way i would be th one who would come out looking stronger. I glanced up at him. his blue eyes looked so full of concern. he looked really sincere.Maybeme acting liek tahtwould be horrible.maybe i would just ask him,why,and what i had done to make him want to break up with me. For now,i couldn't let him see me like this."logan,of course i will meet you,tonight. i jsut need some rest." logan looked up at me. h elooke dlike he was hurt by my sudden longing to be alone."well ok,i dont want to mak eyo faint again. jsut get some rest.' he leane doverand kissed me on the forehead. i smiled weakly,but really wanted to cry my eyes out. he left the room,and i buried my head into a pillow sobbing. part twelve zack's perspective i walke dinto the hospital room,and noticed mx was crying her eyes out. i was really confused. I walked up to Max and sat next to her on the bed. "hey little sister,whats the matter?' max wiped her eyes. "im such an idiot." i looked at her confused still. "where?how,what are you talking about?" max turned awa from me. "i can't believe how foolish i have been. i fell in love with him,and now he wants to break up with me." I put m,y hand over my mouth and tryed not tolaugh. "yor talking about Logan right?' Max looked at me angrily."yes,and you think this is so funny?"i calmed myself down. "Max, Logan told me about the suprise.when he thought you might die or smething,he told me all about it. " Max looked at me. "yea,so now everyone knows about it.great!" i put a hand on her shoulder. "max it isn't what you think." max pulled her hand away. "yea what am i supposed to think. h ewont talk to me. he is hesitant to touc me,and everyone time we are alone together helooks worried about something." i stared up at the ceiling. "oh max,really.listen to yourself.yo sound nuts!!if you only knew whathe was really planning.it is really hard fo rhim, because he has never felt like this before.he jsut wants it to be right." Max held her breath. "so whst iit then?"i grinned."well i cant tell you.if i did,it wouldn't be a suprise." max smiled then,she gave me adeadly serious look. she grabbed y hand and twisted it backwards. i sceamed. "alright i will tell you!" Logan sure isone lucky guy. Max is obviously hea over heels in lovewith him. th look in her eyes was terrible.she looked liek she was going to break into a milion pieces. she squeezed my arm tighter. "lOGAN WANTS YOU TO MARRY HIM!" max let go of hnad and put her hands over her face. tears rolled down her cheeks. "really?' i laughed."yes,Max. really. he has never felt feelings like this before. this is the first tiem he has felt this way,even though he has been divorced and engaged twice before. he was scared tat maybe you didn't feel the same way. you being half cat and all. he thought mybe you would get scared and say it was too much for you.' Max bit her lower lip. "i have dreame about this moment forever!!! i thought that he did't want to,that maybe he never would because he was afraid taht it wouldn't work out." i looked at mAx. "no,he was afraid it would work out. he didn't know how to react if he truly was happy. he has never been truly happy before." Ma leaned forward an dhugged me. i could barely breathe. sh was practically choking me. "mAx..your squeezing off my air supply...Max/" Max let go,and laughed. "well your boy is worried max,so i suggest you get ready and be honest with him. he seemd really sad outside when i passed by him." Max gritted her teeth."i feel so horrible. when he came here to visit me, i told him i wanted to go back to sleep.what if he changes his mind?i was so horrible!" i crossed my fingers. "well i guess you will have to wait until tonight,cindrella." |
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