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Originally Posted by springs  No, they weren't missed. I got that and his superhuman strength. I just wasn't quite shown enough to bring me close to him, and without that wasn't able to entirely go along with it.
Also, if we already know they're elite guards and this has been established, why are we being told about it again here? Surely it would be a case of him going:
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Ok, I probably should not have posted this segment for critique first.
You are right, it should probably not be told again. I was just trying to present it as him thinking back on what had been reported to him.
Basically, the brutes are just well trained humans, as our species can be on Earth. I guess Glemadhal needs to be defined in earlier chapters, but the strength I have shown him to have here should have made it clear that the fight would be easy, even against the best of the best (within human limitations).
The problem, I think, is that you just did not get involved in the story. Like I said, lack of earlier introduction may have had a lot to do with that.
Anyway, much of this is probably best to add to notes on what to put in earlier chapters, although I did have a lot of it thought out.