Re: Short story intro
As short as it was, I have little but praise for the tone. It used quite a few words which are rare nowadays, and a style of setting up the sentences grammatically that is a bit old school, which made me feel like I was transported back a century or so.
It would seem from the comment that this was intentionally, and I think you succeeded. I would definitely be reading more if there were more available to read.
Just keep it up!