Re: Extremes prologue part 2 - 1349 words
I agree with Springs. There is a hell of a lot of info dumping, and frankly I just scanned it because it started to bore me. I don't want all this factual information; I want a story.
When you get to the dialogue between Gary and Ross the readability picks up, but like Springs, I just didn't believe it. To me it seems to be bordering on the ridiculous. Arguments DO happen, but in this setting, when so much is at stake? Sorry, at this point I would be throwing the book across the room in annoyance.
ETA: And saying they lied on a psyche test wouldn't make me believe it either.
ETA 2: Also you have to keep in mind stories HAVE to be logical. Real life may be a bunch of unrelated coincidences but stories need to make sense. It's where the saying "truth is stranger than fiction" comes from.