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Originally Posted by allmywires  Even her quiet footsteps echoed loudly in the silence, the air still and heavy, cool in the predawn. She picked her way up steps and along ledges that had crumbled away from thousands of years of winds and floods, her fingers gripping the dusty rock as tightly as she could manage. Safa had explained briefly to her the day before about the Samireans: an ancient culture that they knew hardly anything about, who worshipped the old gods fervently and built great carved temples in their honour. She crept along a crumbling stairway, her hands clammy on the walls, and swung into the doorway of one of the most ornate buildings in the valley: the Ad Azm Alla, or the Temple of All Gods. |
The line in red wasn't a problem for me whilst I was reading it; what was a problem was the way it turned out to have been sandwiched between two lines of action. (Like Brian said, "and now, back to the story"). If you had ended the paragraph with "honour", the impression of infodumpiness might have been reduced.