Hi Myra,
I'll skip the nitty gritty as others have had a go at that. Your fears about this start are well-founded. It reads more as a biography than a piece of fiction. There's just far too much information and too little happening. What information you've given could be dropped in over three chapters. Worse, I'm afraid, is that the questions it raises (essentially about her childhood) are quite ordinary and don't grab me.
The first paragraph also lets it down. It's all about ordinariness and dullness. It could be good if it ended in a hook e.g. "...but the others didn't think her ordinary, not when she haunted their dreams."
What would make it better is
a) action. Not guns blazing, but her doing something, going somewhere
b) conflict. What is she worried about? Is something important happening?
c ) this is a SFF story, I presume, so something out of the ordinary, a foreshadowing, a flashback, a flashforward
Please don't think this is all negative. You have a good, easy to read style and it's just a matter of practice
