Okay so I have most of the scene I'm working on all singing and dancing showing - pilots climbing into ships, people having conversations etc etc but I have this bit of internal thinking, which is telling.
He looked out of the window of the control room and saw the pilots starting to climb into their ships. His diplomacy had gained nothing – the Families’ had clearly chosen who they expected to win the Empire. He glanced back at Farran and thought he didn’t have time to worry about offence. He needed to be commanding the attack, not communing with some Roamer… guru
So, firstly is there any way to do this without telling? And also - is it such a crime? Is it about the balance between both? Surely telling gives us the opportunity to dig closer into thoughts, to give an internal monologue. Am I mad?
(about the showing that is... not general demeanour