Re: The Many - again!
The first no comma is a pause where I'm trying to draw attention to the barrier.
The first comma splice is correct but style wise feels more correct as it is and highlights the light.
For both the above, would you object too much if the lines were left as they were?
As for the rest of the red ink, you're right but thankfully it's not looking like a crime scene this time!
The first two were errors you could have let me off!!!
There really is no mercy on here!!!
CTG I'm glad you care. My decisions about my writing style have been based on information you and others have shared with me. I am starting to settle on a style of my own and I have the confidence to make a more informed decision about my style because of your help and other members on here. I'm having a few of your lines thank you and they will go straight into my WIP. I'm going to pass on a few as well mate.
Last edited by Bowler1; 11th May 2012 at 02:49 PM.
Reason: Fussing over words again!