Hi ctg, congrats on 2000 posts.
Interesting story, although we miss the detail by jumping in at the end.
I found some of the sentences didn't flow smoothly
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Originally Posted by ctg  Maybe I just have rescued them from the hell. |
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Originally Posted by ctg He flipped a switch on last explosive as the scientist went to unlock the lifting system. |
Also the use of the word metallic twice stood out. Could you use a different word in one of those places?
The explosion felt like it could do with some more description.
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Originally Posted by ctg Tom stopped on his tracks, flipped open the top of the detonator and said, "Don’t try me." Then he heard a loud click. The wall on his right crackled, pulled in and then exploded out. The blast wave full of twisted metal and burning plastic hit him and hurled him around as if he weighted nothing. |
The first part of the second story seemed to keep repeating itself - the POV character upset that things weren't done his way.