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ctg · 25th April 2012, 12:00 AM

Nice. Flows well and I only had one jarring moment in the fifth paragraph, where I started to wonder what you were meaning. But otherwise I would not change a thing. Good job Mister Foreshaw.

25th April 2012, 12:00 AM	#2 (permalink)
ctg weaver of the unseen Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Greater London Posts: 2,856 Blog Entries: 1	Re: Small excerpt: 430 words Nice. Flows well and I only had one jarring moment in the fifth paragraph, where I started to wonder what you were meaning. But otherwise I would not change a thing. Good job Mister Foreshaw.