Thanks TDZ.
I looked at cherries, they do have a season, late summer I believe, so not sure what that pie box was on about... and even if they really didn't have a season it isn't true that it is the
only fruit that doesn't.
She was really annoyed -changed from anger to frustration- with Alyce at the time, so I'd expect her to be a bit rougher with the fruit. But in my search for an all-year-round fruit I decided on lemons, see my last post, which from experience, are really stubborn to pick, so it fits, I think.
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Originally Posted by TheDustyZebra  Anyway, I found it entertaining, and look forward to seeing more as you go! |
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I think I'm quite happy with the way this draft is turning out, but I regret to say this will probably be the last critique I post up, as the book is fully written, just me polishing it up now and redrafting certain chapters. I only posted this excerpt for traditions sake.
From here on I'll be limiting it to critiques through more private channels, I think.