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Old 28th March 2012, 02:35 PM   #15 (permalink)
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Re: PoV/Tense shift experiment -- 432 words

Agree this works much better. I think where it works less well is where you say "I am doing X" or "I am being X" -- this feels like the narrator observing his experiences rather than actually experiencing them. When I wrote my first-person present novel, I found it better to try not to use the "I" word at all in action sequences.
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