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Old 16th March 2012, 05:00 PM   #10 (permalink)
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Re: Inspiring lines

That's very good. The long sentence with all the clauses suggests to me the little movements back and forth to find the right place -- and the end, when it comes, is sharp and precise.

I also like "long, strong" -- for some reason suggesting Mordion is a larger-than-life character. And the repetition of "just" is timed just right.
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