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Clansman · 14th December 2011, 02:33 PM

Good bit here, reiv, especially after the action with Mac. Sarge's failure to hear out Stephen made me want to shake him, so I think your getting the desired effect. I guess that bit of information from Stephen slipped into place for Sarge in the last line.

I really like this POV, and the story is working very well. An excellent bit of writing.

14th December 2011, 02:33 PM	#2 (permalink)
Clansman Lochaber Axeman, QC Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: Canada Posts: 1,893	Re: Cairo Station (8) Good bit here, reiv, especially after the action with Mac. Sarge's failure to hear out Stephen made me want to shake him, so I think your getting the desired effect. I guess that bit of information from Stephen slipped into place for Sarge in the last line. I really like this POV, and the story is working very well. An excellent bit of writing.