Re: Discussion thread -- Three Hundred Word Writing Challenge #3
My last two comment, whipped out at the end of a chaotic day, with no voice reignition software in sight, so any mistakes are down to the old axiom haste makes waste!
A quick thanks to Phoenixthewriter for a vote, I am very touched. This one was experimental for me, and I expected nothing more than a few kind comments if I was lucky. So a vote has me flying with the angels. Thank you.
Cul – Ironically I was catching up with a bit of TV last night and watched the first episode of the Walking Dead, so this story came with some readymade images. Probably a little gorier than the story remotely implied. I found some of the passages (as I have found in many of the stories this month) to be almost beautiful in the way they are constructed. There is a delicious nature to the ay the scene is set, an oasis of peace in a world gone crazy. I don’t know if it was just me, but the payoff, when it came seemed ... I don’t know almost peaceful, an almost gentle certainty to the fate that would fall her brother. Perhaps that is the secret of this one, that although she must go and end her brother, she is bringing peace and rest not eradication.
Ursa – This one was one of the few that actually put a shiver down my spine. Perhaps because I walk through a graveyard virtually every day it hit home a little harder, especially now the nights are getting darker... I really liked the threat the creatures/angels posed throughout the story. It was almost a palpable presence that grew stronger as the story went on. They could have been presented as monsters and the tale would have worked, but Ursa took a slightly different tact and slightly, mysteriously even, humanised one of his creatures, thus deepening the story and in some strange way making the creatures a little more monstrous, because if one decided to save a potential victim but we do not know why, a moment of compassion becomes alien and less understandable even in the moment it happens.