Re: WINDS: Fantasy Excerpt, 1200 words
That's a beautiful picture, very atmospheric and evocative.
My two cents on the silver river question: it hadn't worried me on a read-through, and the imagery still doesn't (but I've also probably spent too much time in textile shops and among embroidery silks) but looking at it in isolation the "dull" perhaps appears to modify the river rather than the silver. Perhaps a hyphen as TP suggested might just help. (And I'm glad to see I'm not the only person who can spend unconscionable amounts of time worrying a single sentence to death!)