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Old 21st September 2010, 07:26 AM   #47 (permalink)
Teresa Edgerton
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Re: WINDS: Fantasy Excerpt, 1200 words

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Originally Posted by TheEndIsNigh View Post
a murky old sludgy river and then go on to use it as a delicate adornment or heroin' attire.
You are slandering that river—it's not even on speaking terms with sludge!

(Or do I mean defaming? Must ask TJ.)

And I'll resist the urge to get into a discussion of textiles, which would derail this thread.

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Originally Posted by J-WO
Maybe describe the river as like 'silk of a dull silver'? Or is that just confusing-sounding?
Yes, I think that's a bit confusing. I could just say it was like a skein of silver thread (which they did use, thread of actual silver), but I don't think it would be that bright at twilight. Or I could say a tarnished silver thread (also accurate), but I suppose that would look like a mixed metaphor even though it isn't.
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