I'd really appreciate some feedback on this. I've been drafting a blurb for the second book in my Imperial series - Imperial Assassin. I'm intending to use it as an advert in the back of the first book, so I suppose this may not end up on the back cover of the book in exactly the same form.
Comments and thoughts, please. Does this grab you?
IMPERIAL ASSASSIN
In a bold effort to rid Shandar of assassins forever, Emperor Surabar declares them outlaws. The Guild of Assassins strikes back – hard. All attempts to locate the assassins’ Headquarters fail. The Emperor needs someone to infiltrate the Guild. Femke is already known to the assassins; only Reynik, the young legionnaire, has a chance. Reynik must learn the Guild’s secrets. But secrets kept hidden for over five centuries command a high price. Reynik is ready to risk his life, but this mission may demand more – this could cost him his soul.