Originally Posted by MattyK
Just a quick question, can anyone point me to a discussion on formatting writing when a character is thinking? I'm sure it will already have been discussed here somewhere but I couldn't find it using the Advanced Search (more my fault than the search tool, I should think).
By the way, Matty - I think the Major bear inadvertently (I don't know, maybe it was on purpose) answered this question when he quoted Chrispy:
Originally Posted by chrispenycate |
I swear that I had not seen Ursa's post when I started mine, or in any way modified mine afterward except to add this postscript.
Typically what I have seen is that the character's thoughts are italicized.
Although remember to keep the character's thoughts in the same paragraph that is already in that character's point of view (POV). I suppose it is possible to have a stand alone paragraph that is devoted to the character's thoughts, but I haven't seen that too often. What follows are some examples of what I beleive is correct. (Anyone, please feel free to correct me.)
Luke Skygazer stared for an almost interminable length of time at the pinprick of light in the night sky. Is it moving? In other words, is it a star, a satellite, or some other man-made object?
Luke turned to the woman standing next to him. "Do you see that light that looks like a star?" he said, extending his arm, and pointing a finger toward the sky. -or- Is that light in the sky moving? Luke wondered; is it a star, a satellite, or some other man-made object? If I ask this woman standing next to me, will she misinterpret my intentions?
The difference here is that both of these paragraphs are written from Luke's point of view, but one is composed of third person omnicient action and first person thought, whereas the other is pure first person thought. Typically thoughts are in italics, and they are almost always in the first person voice. The narrator could say:
Luke thought, Is that light in the sky moving?
But that would be using the omnicient (sees all from above) voice, and my impression is that the omnicient voice is less favored these days, and also dangerous, as it leads to "head-hopping" (see earlier discussions in this thread.)
Would anyone like to expound on the difference between "third person omnicient" and pure "omnicient"?