[Mad Tam McC]

Hello,

I think 'pony tail' should be one word. In the same vein I'd prefer 'sing-song' to 'sing songy'

The 'Ret' bit threw me as well. If you start mixing 'r' and 'l' up then it can end up sounding like an oriental caricature.

The paragraph
'It had been for handling the forbidden parts of creational energy that he had been banished and not allowed to achieve his black and gold robes until he had learned patience. Only fourth slash or higher battlemages are allowed to wield the abilities of a true creational mage or Elvynn war wizard.'

doesn't read quite right
How about...
'It had been for handling the forbidden parts of creational energy for which he had been banished and so (or thus) not allowed to achieve his black and gold robes until he had learned patience. Only fourth slash or higher battlemages are allowed to wield the abilities of a true creational mage or Elvynn war wizard.'

This could be a difference due to different versions of English, but practice when a verb should be practise, so it should be.

'He preferred letting them think such and practised others in his chambers, alone or with his son'