| Re: Lilium: Conversation
Ah sorry it took me so long to get around to this. This was cool, I could really sense the connection between the brothers. Personally, I thought brother brother relationships are fasinating. Also about the dialouge. I didn't even think about the way they spoke, how young they sounded. Everything flowed nice and I don't want it to change. It's your choice but here's my one fear. What if it sounds too forced, so don't try too hard when you go over editing this to make Jasper and Jake sound older.
oo also...loved the Batman reference. |