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Old 20th May 2008, 08:45 AM   #9 (permalink)
MetalJon
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Re: Water of Life excerpt

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You give us a jerry built space station, not even rotating, then behave as if it had Earth-normal gravity.


That's sort-of explained a bit later in the story (which I haven't posted here).

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what's ony respite; the stations ? Or should that be "their"?


I was trying to give an impression of the creaky mechanical systems working tirelessly despite their `creakiness'. The only rest that the systems get is when they occasionally break down. I guess this part is a bit clumsy and probably not necessary!

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You say "it" was curious, then proceed to give us a list of very varied (and doubtless uncomfortable) objects.



Good point - I'll revise...

thanks!
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