HERESY! thank you, i was hoping someone would finally tell me ;P
And i thought you spell the third less than 10 and after it you write them as numbers?
And thanks for it, i needed some help I guess but this wasn't the final copy and I'll try and work with your suggestions and the next time i post it I hope i've used what you've said well.
-- A scream ripped through the air which could of easily given away their position
How about that for an opening?